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Darkmagi
10-08-2007, 02:54 PM
Looking upon face
Gazing at allure
Shade enhancing eyes
Rouge emboldening lips
Dimples in cheeks
Glasses perched for eyes to beckon me on
Bosom pushed to front by velvet ingenuity
Fishnet teasingly hidden under black silk

Embracing those lips
Tasting that rouge
Nibbling tongue
Licking teeth
Kissing over cheek to ear
Pausing to remove glasses
Eyes closed yet senses over active
Taste and touch guide us now

Mouths dance yet no tune plays
Magnetism guides moves
Fingers tread over clothed parts
Intricately seeking clasps
Consensually unlocking hooks
Flesh is freed exposed to bedroom light
Moisture stirred with digits stroke

Carnality unstoppable
Blood dances to passion
Thrusting primordial movements
Bodies conjoined timed together
Sounds hang lustily in the erotic mist
Internal metronomic rhythm plays 'tween them
Fluids inject blissfully, ecstatic euphoria erupts

Darkmagi
10-08-2007, 02:55 PM
Have a question, does this need another verse. I'm not too sure as I'm happy with how it is, but have a nagging feeling it needs another verse. Any suggestions

~faerie~
10-08-2007, 04:11 PM
It sounds good, but I think you are right. It needs a little more. A final culmination, maybe?
Hope that is helpful.

Jade

ThisYouWillDo
10-08-2007, 04:50 PM
It sounds good, but I think you are right. It needs a little more. A final culmination, maybe?
Hope that is helpful.

Jade

My thoughts exactly - but perhaps you need to take longer than 1 verse to reach that final ... umm ... climax

TYWD
(aka the 3-minute wonder)

Darkmagi
10-09-2007, 03:36 PM
Well added another verse to it, hope you enjoy!!