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~faerie~
10-12-2007, 09:44 PM
Despair calls my name,
I answer with anguished cries.
I was just a game,
My soul sucked in by your eyes.
A siege you laid upon my heart,
I thought that you were true.
In your arms I fell apart,
As I laid with you.
You took what you wanted,
And you led me astray.
My body you made burn,
In every possible way.
You made me your toy,
A slave to your call.
You made me addicted,
But you never loved me at all.
You took me for a fool,
And I fell right in.
I should have known you’d be cruel,
Your kisses taste like sin.

nifkinz
10-13-2007, 03:00 AM
Love this!! The reality of the sad words sucked me right in...and before I knew it, I wanted to kill that jerk! lol Very well written.

Arria
10-13-2007, 11:48 AM
I will gladly assist in your plans, nifkinz... that must have been some jerk for sure.

ShyGreenEyedGrl, that was very well written.

Kevin100
12-18-2007, 10:23 AM
Such a powerful ending.

sub-butterfly
01-22-2008, 06:12 AM
count me in arria and nifkinz, i think we all know that feeling in some way.
wonderful poem and i agree such a well written ending

mastermind26
03-04-2008, 07:26 AM
the last line of ur poetry is incredible........great poetry.

blythe spirit
10-23-2008, 07:04 AM
Excellent last line.

Skyybird
10-26-2008, 09:16 AM
I love this...very very much something I can relate to.

Nothing worse than those sinful kisses.

Hugs x

jeanne
11-14-2008, 06:17 AM
Very evocative. It sure does make the reader feel emotions.

Birdy
11-14-2008, 05:01 PM
Loved the poem, how could he do such a thing

rsjankowski
11-14-2008, 05:28 PM
surprisingly through a small quirk of fate, this dominant still feels the same about his first marriage when she left. amazing how love can make slaves of dominants to try to do the best for thier submissives. anyone watch labyrinth and remember what the goblin king said


~ I ask for so little. Just let me rule you, and you can have everything that you want.~ Jareth the Goblin King

~ Just fear me, love me, do as I say, and I will be your slave.~ Jareth the Goblin King

how true this is for those in love and how cruelly broken the heart when loyalty falters

bravo shygreeneyedgrl your poetry rocks

craven
11-15-2008, 03:05 PM
mmmm yes wonderful, thank you, "kisses tasting of sin" and soul sucked in by his eyes, i love those lines, i feel them, as i do your poem, i enjoy reading your thoughts a lot....

Echoes
01-11-2015, 04:13 PM
reading all these,
reading this makes my muse stir again
no matter what one does to try and harm
they cannot stop you from being you
they cannot bury any heart forever
this is what makes you strong
your heart still beats and will break whatever bonds he or she has entrapped