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Jennifer-Nylon
11-14-2002, 09:21 PM
Hi, I'm new and new to writing so I would appreciate feedback on my story 'Jennifer'

BDSM_Tourguide
11-14-2002, 11:15 PM
... as soon as I read it, I'll be happy to let you know how I feel about it. Pay attention to your feedback page.

Jennifer-Nylon
11-14-2002, 11:31 PM
I am discovering features on this great site as I go.:) I've found the reviews and thank you.

BDSM_Tourguide
11-14-2002, 11:32 PM
... just doing my job, Ma'am. Just doing my job. ;)

ErikavonKZ
11-15-2002, 05:05 AM
Beautifully written indeed!

We particularly liked the bit with Sylvia: we belong, you see, to the school of pornographic theory - pertaining to texts as well as to art - which holds that that the number of participants -- active or pasive -- people musst be odd. Thus one is OK (for a while) and you terat that beautifully (the several lovely masturbation bits), three is great (hence Sylvia), five requires some mastery (which you certainly seem to have), and with seven ... we don't know. The Divine Marquis could pull off seven, but then he was a genius, wasn't he?

In Part Two, will there be a party?

With much admiration,

Erika von KZ

Jennifer-Nylon
11-15-2002, 12:34 PM
Erika,
what nice things to say.:o

Part 2 has been sent and part 3 is almost done. You are giving me wicked ideas.;)

ErikavonKZ
11-15-2002, 04:58 PM
Looking forward to Part Two (couldn't find it yet).

And, Jennifer, what a compliment: "You are giving me wicked ideas".

We love perverting nice people like you.

Erika & Heinz

Jennifer-Nylon
11-15-2002, 07:47 PM
Part 2 will appear when the site is updated, I guess. I'm up to Part 5 and erika, you did give me wicked ideas!:o

ErikavonKZ
11-16-2002, 12:32 AM
First now do we see that the message icon we thought was a yawn (eyes closed, mouth open, I mean...) officially translates as "red face."

We are very fond of red faces and other parts of the anatomy.

E&H

Jennifer-Nylon
11-16-2002, 04:10 AM
Originally posted by ErikavonKZ
First now do we see that the message icon we thought was a yawn (eyes closed, mouth open, I mean...) officially translates as "red face."

We are very fond of red faces and other parts of the anatomy.

E&H

It was a blush:o

Nothing more.

Have I got the smilie lore wrong?:rolleyes: :p

I try with what is available
(That's the story of my life)

ErikavonKZ
11-16-2002, 04:33 AM
Why "Nothing more"? Is there anything more delightful than a blush on a woman's face?

Well, yes, maybe. And no, there isn't: having made a pervert BLUSH, that's something to cherish.

You sent me back to that great Anastassja site: several - all?- of the Frollo drawings illustrate our fantasy involving cruel ladies running brothels.

Want a sample?

Erika

Jennifer-Nylon
11-16-2002, 12:34 PM
Originally posted by ErikavonKZ
Why "Nothing more"? Is there anything more delightful than a blush on a woman's face?

Well, yes, maybe. And no, there isn't: having made a pervert BLUSH, that's something to cherish.

You sent me back to that great Anastassja site: several - all?- of the Frollo drawings illustrate our fantasy involving cruel ladies running brothels.

Want a sample?

Erika

Please:)


(Part 2 has been posted and I've sent Part 3 so it should be up in a few days - Part 3 is harder)

ErikavonKZ
11-16-2002, 01:24 PM
The sitting lady in Leodom04 is surely a client.

In 16. we believe we see a madam punishing a toy, perhaps because the toy misbehaved. Or is this entertainment on the small stage in the bar? What do you think?

In Leodom26 a madam instructs a toy selected by two clients, probably watching: "... or else," the admonition ends, and the madam winks at the clients. Needless to say, the madam just loves it and will probably be watching how the clients enjoy their beautiful prey.

Erika & Heinz

ErikavonKZ
11-16-2002, 01:27 PM
Perhaops one can post only one image with each message.

ErikavonKZ
11-16-2002, 01:29 PM
Third and last sample for public display (we do have some up our sleaveless tank-top).

Jennifer-Nylon
11-16-2002, 02:24 PM
Yumm!:o

Jennifer-Nylon
11-20-2002, 02:24 AM
I am a shameless feedback slut, I admit it. I love the feedback and reviews this story has generated.:) I feel this could rather become addictive;).

I know it's not perfect, I never expected it to me and I'm overhwlemed by the offers to assist.:) It's all terribly nice.:)

Thank you:):o

Jennifer-Nylon
11-23-2002, 11:24 PM
More parts coming

soleil
01-19-2003, 05:55 AM
Great story, Jennifer.

May i ask what the "nylon" part of your name means?

ErikavonKZ, love those drawings :)

LadyAmanda
01-19-2003, 03:27 PM
I love those drawings, too! That second one is giving me some wonderful ideas ... I can't think of anywhere in this flat where my subs' arms could be over her head that high. Hmmm, I think I'm going off to the hardware store - again! Wait - how about over the top of a door? She'd have to face the door, one breast on each side of it, rope on the door handle, under her crotch, me behind her, with a crop ... Oh yes, that could work ;)

AmandasSpankee
01-20-2003, 03:59 PM
Oh good, just what you needed, another way of tying me up ... maybe you guys on the forum could stop coming up with new ideas? She's pretty creative all by herself.

LadyAmanda
01-20-2003, 06:53 PM
Quiet, slut!

You know you love it when I try new things on you. Tell you what. On Friday, I'll try this out on you. Think you can wait that long? think about it every day; imagine what it's gonna feel like.
Anticipation can be a sweet torture all by itself.