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Simpson
05-20-2004, 02:11 PM
damn! i can`t think of a good title.


Here is my idea for a opening of a story:

A 14 or 15 year old girl found some pleasure in being inflicted pain by her parent because of her foolish mistake in the house. She start to like this pain, and humilation, and want even more pain in the process.

She goes through a phrase of self discovery, by reading some stories online like bdsmlibrary.com, and than she found the courage to submit herself to her "ordinary" parent to be their servant and play thing. The parent was puzzle and do not know how to react. A twist: The father ask her to eloberate on a piece of paper how she want to be treated----- etc...

le forgeron
05-21-2004, 01:05 AM
What about a title about "Essay", something like

"A particular essay"

or

"special homework"
if the piece of paper is of any real importance in the story.

The title is only the least part of a story, IMHO.
Remember that many book have their title decided by the editor/marketing section, rather than the author.

Mobius
05-25-2004, 04:45 PM
damn! i can`t think of a good title.


Here is my idea for a opening of a story:

A 14 or 15 year old girl found some pleasure in being inflicted pain by her parent because of her foolish mistake in the house. She start to like this pain, and humilation, and want even more pain in the process.

She goes through a phrase of self discovery, by reading some stories online like bdsmlibrary.com, and than she found the courage to submit herself to her "ordinary" parent to be their servant and play thing. The parent was puzzle and do not know how to react. A twist: The father ask her to eloberate on a piece of paper how she want to be treated----- etc...

But maybe you can make a new twist. Like she invites her teacher in for tea and she finds out about the parents incest interest and helps out with the daughters pain interest. Oops sorry that has been done to.
Told you I am not a writer.

rallan
07-24-2004, 05:58 AM
Well I'd start by not having the main character go to an online erotic story site. Always seems such a forced and self-referential thing. I'd have the girl start misbehaving to get punished more often, and experimenting by herself, with things gradually (or not so gradually) either leading to a parent catching her in the act and getting a confession from her (which is naturally where the real fun just begins) or suspecting what she's up to and deciding to gradually up the ante to see how far the daughter's willing to go.

GaryWilcox
07-24-2004, 07:17 AM
Hmmm, some ideas for titles. Some are pretty lame, but they're included to maybe inspire a better alternative.

What I Want for Myself and My Life: (insert character name)'s Essay
Simple enough. This would be a possible title if the story is entirely first person in the girl's view.

Do With Me What You Will

This could be either 1st or 3rd.

The Essay

The simplest title available-- right to the point, nothing clever.

Five-thousand Words

Or, round up to the words in the essay to the nearest 1,000.

The Girl Who Was Good At Being Bad

Terrible, very cliché, but I included it just because it might give you better ideas. :o

Over the Knee

Perhaps if you get in the girl's head a bit as she's in position and anticipating that first glorious slap on the ass, you can use this title to capture that mood.

Spank Me

Something obvious.

Spankee

Ugh. I hate this one, but there it is anyways.

Anyways, without reading it, and at the crack of dawn (for me anyways), this is all I could come up with. Good luck!

slavelucy
07-25-2004, 06:04 AM
Just Write for Daddy?

Hmmm, it's a tricky one.

sl

petpleasureyes
08-03-2004, 10:49 AM
A take on "The Essay" but more informative:

"An Essay for Daddy"

slave gary

krista
08-31-2004, 04:32 PM
Here a twist...maybe not a great one

but why the Daddy? :[

petpleasureyes
08-31-2004, 10:07 PM
i agree, involving both parents would be a lot more interesting. i've had a strange life myself and growing up i had a short (3 year) thing going on with my own niece. We never had intercourse, just some kissing, touching and finally oral sex. my niece was only 5 years younger than i was, unfortunately, i had the will power to hold back. But when i look back on things at this later stage in my life (i'm in my 40's now and this happened in our teens), my niece was not only my best friend but i also have to admit she was also the most perfect match for me i've ever met. i've never been married and she's gone through 3 lousy marriages. Our parents had a lot to do with separating us. Now i'm not sure if what my niece and i had going between us was such an evil thing.

Mobius
09-01-2004, 02:55 AM
I don't know if I would call relations between uncle and niece incest. In some parts of the US it is common for cousins to marry. Not a big deal. Although you usually hear banjo's when it happens and there is a trailer park near by. but that what happens. I would call the taboo on uncles and nieces a minor, Mearly a raised Eyebrow.

Incest is always been a favorite fantasy for me. Don't know why. Never was abused never had any one take liberty's with me nor did I take liberty's with any one that I knew.

But I love to read about Incest. But I am aware that incest should never be forced and can cause great harm psychologically and emotionally.(sorry if the spell checker missed those)

You will always hear of the emotional wreckage that incest causes but you rarely hear of the cases where incest was a positive thing.

It is still taboo. But if your in the trailer park and the banjo is in the corner then go with the flow.

petpleasureyes
09-01-2004, 10:48 AM
i'm not exactly sure when things really started between my niece and myself. But we started kissing when she was 11 and i was 16. She actually initiated this, i knew we both felt the same about each other for a long time but i never would have done anything about it if she hadn't started it most likely. For me, the time we spent together has always been a sweet fond memory and even today, i can tell she still feels close to me and our friendship continues. A few times at family reunions, things almost happened between us, but it always seemed like someone would catch us. There's no secret in my family that there's something more than an uncle/niece relationship/love going between the both of us.