Storey Concpet: Reluctant Dom

[Master13]

The story will take place in a setting were slavery is legal, either historical or fantasy. Our hero is a man who recieves a slave girl as a gift. She is young, beautiful, vigorous, and obedient (but not too obedient), ideal as a sex slave. The problem is that our hero is morally opposed to the slavery in his society. He can't free her or give her back without offending the giver who is a wealthy/powerful man. So he reluctantly keeps her as his slave. He gives her housework to do and struggles with the temptation to use her sexually. That temptation is very strong. Though wont admit it to himself, having a slave girl at his command is the most arousing thing that has ever happened to him. Deep down he's a dom. Meanwhile the slave girl is wondering why he wont use her, and why he keeps averting his gaze from her. She worries that there is something wrong with her. So she starts trying to entice him into using her, first sublty, and as time goes on, not so subtly. Eventually something she does provokes him to whip her. After the whipping he takes her, as a master using his slave.

[Mobius]

sounds like a good story, go for it.
I will be happy to read it when it is posted.

[Gallardo]

Great idea. It could almost be a discourse on philosophy and psychology as well as erotica.

[janie]

I'll read that too! :D

(Want it proofed?)

janie

[Master13]

I've written several pages of the first draft. I like the way it's turning out, but I wont be ready to post anything for a while longer. The title will be "A Reluctant Master." I'm going with a medievalish fantasy setting of my own creation. I intend to reuse it for other stories.
Here are a couple teasers:

Jasmine was surprised by her new master’s first command. He hadn’t even seen her naked yet and he was sending her away on errands. She was well trained though, and hesitated for only a moment before taking the purse and turning to leave the alchemist’s shop. Such hesitation, as brief as it was, might have earned her a punishment from her former master. Daniel hadn’t even noticed.
Daniel watched her leave. Her hips swayed slightly as she walked, giving a peak at her well rounded bottom cheeks with each step. He had recognized that she was beautiful when he first saw her. Now she seemed to be the most attractive women in the world. Thoughts of courting her entered his mind. He couldn’t woo a slave of course. Yet, she was his slave now. Which could be even better. With a slave he could...
“No,” he said aloud. “I will not use that girl as a plaything for my own pleasure.” Even as he made the vow, he couldn’t help imagining what a magnificent plaything she would be.

Jasmine looked up cautiously, “I will not be punished master?”
“You have done nothing do deserve punishment,” Daniel said. “If anything, I owe you an apology for yelling at you.”
“Thank you master,” Jasmine said with a wide smile. “Should I try on my new clothing now master?”
“Yes, go ahead,” Daniel said.
Jasmine reached back to unfasten her top. The flimsy covering fell to the floor. Daniel had not intended for her to change in front of him. But once she willingly bared her flesh to him, he couldn’t bring himself to stop her. Without his intervention, she untied her loin cloth, and sent it to the floor as well. Her pussy was covered by a neatly trimmed triangle of golden hair. It occurred to Daniel that she would look even better with bear pussy lips. He suppressed the idea of making her shave her crotch.
The happy slave girl rummaged through the other bag. She produced a very short red skirt, and matching halter top. Daniel found her getting dressed almost a alluring as when she stripped. She did a twirl, causing the skirt to flare out and giving Daniel another look at her pussy and ass.
Jasmine spent the rest of the evening modeling different slave outfits. Most were made of either silk or leather (or steal in the case of the chastity belt). They all showed off far more than they covered up. By the time she tried on the last one, Daniel was accustomed to seeing her naked, but found the sight no less attractive.
“I have a guest bedroom. It will be your room now,” Daniel told Jasmine as it was getting late.
“I will not be sharing your bed master?” Jasmine asked.
“No, you’ll be sleeping in your own bed, at least tonight,” Daniel replied. He silently berated himself for adding the last part.
Jasmine was disappointed. Repeatedly modeling and stripping in front of his hungry gaze had aroused her. More importantly, she was growing fond of her new master. She was eager for a chance to please him in the bedroom. She was also confused. She knew he found her attractive. Why wouldn’t he use her?

[mythicat]

I like the way it's turning out, but I wont be ready to post anything for a while longer.
*cry*

Add one more name to the list of expectant readers! :)

[whippedcream]

I like this idea very very much. Have you ever read the book Phantom, by Susan Kay? There's a scene in there like that, where the main character is given a young slave girl to use, but she's so afraid of him that he can't bring himself to do it and gives her back. Every time I read that part I'm like nooooooooo (especially since they killed the girl as a result of her lack of cooperation).
I would love to read a story with that theme. Maybe I'll even write one.

[Master13]

I hope to have "A Reluctant Master" ready to post in its entirety before Christmas. I wouldn't count on it though. If I don't make it, I'll post a new projected deadline here.

[Eraser]

Looking forward to it.

[Cokera]

Oh yes! Please continue on the process. Sounds like the makings of a great story.

[Master13]

I'm still doing some final editing. I will submit it to the library sometime next week.

The more praise I get for a story no one has read yet, the more nervous I become that I'm going to disappoint you all. Which makes me spend more time editing. Which makes more people post here in anticipation. It's a vicious cycle. :)

[Master13]

I just submitted the story to the library. I still feel like it needs polishing. In fact I was makeing changes minutes before I submitted it. But I realized that I could keep "polishing" it forever and never be completely satisfied.

[Eraser]

still under the title A Reluctant Master ?

[Master13]

still under the title A Reluctant Master ?
Yes, It should be listed as A Reluctant Master by Master13. I assume it will be included in the next update, but this is my first, so I don't actually know how long to expect between when I submitted it and when it will appear in the library.

[Master13]

The synopsis was suppoes to have a second part as follows:
Daniel is one of Cerna’s many merchants, an alchemist. Unlike most men of Cerna, he doesn’t enjoy the availability of feminine flesh for sale. He is one of the few Carnians with moral objections to slavery. What will he do when a slave girl comes into his possession?I'm not sure if I made a mistake and left that out, or if the second part got cut off for some reason. Either way it's not that big a deal. I just thought it would be nice to have one paragraph about the setting, that I could reuse for any other stories in the same setting, and one for the specific story.

[ProjectEuropa]

The problem is that our hero is morally opposed to the slavery in his society.

I'm struggling with the concept of a reluctant slave owner in a society where slavery is accepted. Even the great Greek philosophers never had a problem with slavery and Socrates even justified it. It was conflicting values of a much later era where people in the west started to object to slavery and that a mere 250-200 years ago. In fact slavery in the US has been abolished for less than 150 years.

I know I know its only fiction but one has to create a believable world for the reader to get lost in a story.

[Master13]

I'm struggling with the concept of a reluctant slave owner in a society where slavery is accepted. Even the great Greek philosophers never had a problem with slavery and Socrates even justified it. It was conflicting values of a much later era where people in the west started to object to slavery and that a mere 250-200 years ago. In fact slavery in the US has been abolished for less than 150 years.

I know I know its only fiction but one has to create a believable world for the reader to get lost in a story.
1. There are always people with views that differ greatly from the norm.
2. If slave holding societies never produced people who were opposed to it, it would still be an accepted practice today.
3. It is just fantasy. One of the main reasons for setting a story in a fictional world, is so that you arn't limited to real world history and culture

[truckinnhorsin]

-going to go read this- sounds really good.


and perhaps he grewu p in a non slave owning society, and then moved there? who knows. theres lots of possible explanations.

Teni