Laila
12-28-2008, 02:42 PM
Hello,
I am finally writing again. And I did it with the intention of having it put up here - but now I don't know. It seems to have a bit of a slow start for the library and I'm not sure if I hit the right tone.
So I thought I'd put it up here first and maybe you can help me a bit. Tell me if you like it so far - what I could improve. I only have two chapters so far but if there is any interest I'd post more as I am writing them.
Its a bit of a bdsm fairy-tale... there will be magic and gypsies and curses and a young woman thrown into all this. But this is just the beginning...
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Chapter One – The End of the Tunnel
The passageway was cold and damp. Rough stone walls lined the narrow corridor and what had once been a rich, red carpet was now a greyish pulp, hardly distinguishable from the moss that sprouted between the blocks of stone. It smelled of rodents and of decay.
Soleil shivered under the thin white linen dress, but the impulse to rub her hands together and place the warm palms on her cold stomach, hips and breasts was quelled instantly. For her hands were tied behind her back and could not warm her milky flesh, could not quell the goose-bumps that had erupted all over her arms and breasts. Her face a mask of proud indifference, it was only her small, hesitant steps that gave her fear away. Inwardly she squirmed at each squishy sound of her naked little feet touching the damp and rotten carpet. Every rustle, be it ever so tiny, made her want to throw her head around to look for rodents and spiders – but she kept her slow, painful pace, not moving any more than was absolutely necessary for her to keep going.
The corridor was long and only partly illuminated. Often, she could hardly see the ground beneath her feet. It was in these moments that she could close her eyes, and – for a heartbeat or two - imagine herself back at her little cottage, barefoot in the cabbage patch. A silent tear ran down her cheek – she would never see her little cottage again. Nor her father or her mother.
Finally, it had seemed like she had been walking for hours, the corridor felt less damp and better illuminated. She could feel it slowly sloping upwards under her feet. Her steps became slower and smaller until she came to a halt – her whole body revolting against taking one more step towards her destination. From not too far away, she heard the bark of a large dog and the creak of and old door and her chest convulsed in a desperate sob. She had been willing to play her part, to bear the punishment that her village had been subjected to for so many years, she had been willing to take it all on – but now, faced with the faceless terror of what she might find at the end of the corridor, her body rebelled. She found herself fighting the rope that bound her wrists – but to no avail. She could not even brush away her tears, could not stop them from staining the white linen that covered her bare milky breasts.
A second time, the deep bark disturbed the silence and this time she could just hear the resonating sound of a human voice, but she could not make out what was said. Her feet were cold, her wrists hurt and her chest trembled – but finally, facing the reality of her situation, she physically forced herself take another step. And another.
She only had these two options – go ahead or run home. And she no longer had a home – were she to go back, her village would be doomed to suffer, to starve, to live in misery for ten years until a new virgin bride could be sent into the tunnel.
She took another step, regained her resolve and with it, her slow, steady pace.
Finally, the corridor opened up into a small ante-chamber and a heavy wooden door at the opposite wall. Slowly walking into the middle of the room, she tried to calm her shaking breath, unable to look anywhere but the door.
There she stood for minutes, maybe half an hour unable to move. And even if she could – she had no free hands to knock, nor the voice to call out. Finally, he heard a rustle, and a dog barking, so much louder now that he was so close.
"Down, Marquis!" Said a low, stern voice… it was muffled and reached her only through the heavy door, but she could already tell that it was a voice that didn't need raising to cause a response. It was a voice that knew no disobedience.
With a loud, aching creak, the door opened and Soleil started and took a step back, when the largest dog, she had ever seen, loped through the crack in the door. Panting like he was, his long pink tongue hanging over his teeth, he almost looked like he was smiling, his huge grey head swaying. Sniffing loudly, he approached; his cold, wet nose poked against her hip and then he walked around her and licked her bound hands. A tiny smile creased her lips as she tried to look over her shoulder and to pull her hands out of the dog's reach. It tickled.
"Flushed out our little bird, have you, Marquis?" A deep, resonating voice asked amused. Soleil's head flew around, she stood perfectly still as she regarded the man, standing in the open doorway.
She estimated his age around 40, but she couldn't be sure. He was tall and broad-shouldered and was of that stringy muscle tone that made him look almost haggard under the thin, white shirt und simple breaches. If it were simply for his appearance, she might have mistaken him for a man-servant – but nothing about him allowed that conclusion - Not his stance, not the way he held his hands, not the superior twinkle in his cold blue eyes.
"A little plumper than the last one…" He commented coolly, with a small smile on his lips and she could see his eyes tracing her plush, swelling bosom, her small, feminine stomach, her narrow waist and her ample hips. "You'll do, little bird…" He cocked his head to the side and chuckled, "Patience, Marquis!" And then stepped aside, inviting her to enter with a casually elegant gesture of his arm.
Soleil, lowering her eyes, followed his unspoken command and hesitantly taking one step after the other and not making the smallest sound, she passed her new Master and entered into a lushly decorated hall. A fire was blazing in one of the fireplaces, warm, plush carpets covered the floors and pictures of far-away lands hung at the walls. Soleil stopped in the middle of the room, her naked feet sunk into the warm carpet and her tiny toes caressed the soft material.
"Turn around, child." Her Master said in his low unassuming voice and swallowing, Soleil obeyed. Her eyes cast to the floor, she stood before him, waiting. Waiting for her fate to show, for her death, her torture, her pain – but it didn't come.
The man took a few steps forward until he was close enough for her to smell the richness of his musky fragrance. His hand reached for her neck and the tips of his fingers danced on her cool skin, traced the line of her thin dress, and momentarily cupped her taut, pillowy breast. Soleil gasped and her eyes dared up to meet his in fear and confusion.
"You are beautiful."
In response, she cast her eyes down again, blushing, "You have been crying." He stated then, running his strong hand gently over her cheekbone.
"What is your name, child?" Taking her chin between his thumb and forefinger, he tilted her face upwards again until her wide brown eyes looked up into his.
"Soleil… my Lord." She whispered, ever more conscious of her bound hands, her naked body under the paper-thin dress and the closeness of her Master.
"Soleil." He spoke her name like he would taste good wine, probing the sound of it, letting it resonate on his tongue. It caused a warm shiver to run down her spine.
"Learn to live under my rule, Soleil, and you might not have anything to fear. Learn to yield, like your body is designed to yield, and you might even find happiness. Sometimes. While it lasts." His smile suddenly seemed a little melancholy, but only for a moment before he patted her cheek and ran his fingers through her lush, reddish brown hair and finally chuckled at her wide-eyed expression, so full of innocent confusion, fear and hope. "You'll do fine."
In a sharp motion, he turned away from her and clapped his hands together. Soleil started and looked around. A woman had appeared from behind a curtain. Her hair was white as snow even though she didn't seem older than fifty and she was still beautiful, thin and soft as a willow-tree and at a gesture, she stepped into the room and approached with an elegant gait. Her feet, too, were bare, her dress, rich green silk, melted softly against the skin. Once in front of him, she curtseyed and kissed her Master's hand.
"My Lord?" She asked, her voice was low, warm and feminine and though her face appeared docile at first glance, Soleil thought she detected a glimmer of ardent adoration for the man in front of her.
Master cupped her cheek and gave her gentle smile before he nodded towards Soleil.
"Prepare her, and then take her to the drawing room."
I am finally writing again. And I did it with the intention of having it put up here - but now I don't know. It seems to have a bit of a slow start for the library and I'm not sure if I hit the right tone.
So I thought I'd put it up here first and maybe you can help me a bit. Tell me if you like it so far - what I could improve. I only have two chapters so far but if there is any interest I'd post more as I am writing them.
Its a bit of a bdsm fairy-tale... there will be magic and gypsies and curses and a young woman thrown into all this. But this is just the beginning...
____________________________________________
Chapter One – The End of the Tunnel
The passageway was cold and damp. Rough stone walls lined the narrow corridor and what had once been a rich, red carpet was now a greyish pulp, hardly distinguishable from the moss that sprouted between the blocks of stone. It smelled of rodents and of decay.
Soleil shivered under the thin white linen dress, but the impulse to rub her hands together and place the warm palms on her cold stomach, hips and breasts was quelled instantly. For her hands were tied behind her back and could not warm her milky flesh, could not quell the goose-bumps that had erupted all over her arms and breasts. Her face a mask of proud indifference, it was only her small, hesitant steps that gave her fear away. Inwardly she squirmed at each squishy sound of her naked little feet touching the damp and rotten carpet. Every rustle, be it ever so tiny, made her want to throw her head around to look for rodents and spiders – but she kept her slow, painful pace, not moving any more than was absolutely necessary for her to keep going.
The corridor was long and only partly illuminated. Often, she could hardly see the ground beneath her feet. It was in these moments that she could close her eyes, and – for a heartbeat or two - imagine herself back at her little cottage, barefoot in the cabbage patch. A silent tear ran down her cheek – she would never see her little cottage again. Nor her father or her mother.
Finally, it had seemed like she had been walking for hours, the corridor felt less damp and better illuminated. She could feel it slowly sloping upwards under her feet. Her steps became slower and smaller until she came to a halt – her whole body revolting against taking one more step towards her destination. From not too far away, she heard the bark of a large dog and the creak of and old door and her chest convulsed in a desperate sob. She had been willing to play her part, to bear the punishment that her village had been subjected to for so many years, she had been willing to take it all on – but now, faced with the faceless terror of what she might find at the end of the corridor, her body rebelled. She found herself fighting the rope that bound her wrists – but to no avail. She could not even brush away her tears, could not stop them from staining the white linen that covered her bare milky breasts.
A second time, the deep bark disturbed the silence and this time she could just hear the resonating sound of a human voice, but she could not make out what was said. Her feet were cold, her wrists hurt and her chest trembled – but finally, facing the reality of her situation, she physically forced herself take another step. And another.
She only had these two options – go ahead or run home. And she no longer had a home – were she to go back, her village would be doomed to suffer, to starve, to live in misery for ten years until a new virgin bride could be sent into the tunnel.
She took another step, regained her resolve and with it, her slow, steady pace.
Finally, the corridor opened up into a small ante-chamber and a heavy wooden door at the opposite wall. Slowly walking into the middle of the room, she tried to calm her shaking breath, unable to look anywhere but the door.
There she stood for minutes, maybe half an hour unable to move. And even if she could – she had no free hands to knock, nor the voice to call out. Finally, he heard a rustle, and a dog barking, so much louder now that he was so close.
"Down, Marquis!" Said a low, stern voice… it was muffled and reached her only through the heavy door, but she could already tell that it was a voice that didn't need raising to cause a response. It was a voice that knew no disobedience.
With a loud, aching creak, the door opened and Soleil started and took a step back, when the largest dog, she had ever seen, loped through the crack in the door. Panting like he was, his long pink tongue hanging over his teeth, he almost looked like he was smiling, his huge grey head swaying. Sniffing loudly, he approached; his cold, wet nose poked against her hip and then he walked around her and licked her bound hands. A tiny smile creased her lips as she tried to look over her shoulder and to pull her hands out of the dog's reach. It tickled.
"Flushed out our little bird, have you, Marquis?" A deep, resonating voice asked amused. Soleil's head flew around, she stood perfectly still as she regarded the man, standing in the open doorway.
She estimated his age around 40, but she couldn't be sure. He was tall and broad-shouldered and was of that stringy muscle tone that made him look almost haggard under the thin, white shirt und simple breaches. If it were simply for his appearance, she might have mistaken him for a man-servant – but nothing about him allowed that conclusion - Not his stance, not the way he held his hands, not the superior twinkle in his cold blue eyes.
"A little plumper than the last one…" He commented coolly, with a small smile on his lips and she could see his eyes tracing her plush, swelling bosom, her small, feminine stomach, her narrow waist and her ample hips. "You'll do, little bird…" He cocked his head to the side and chuckled, "Patience, Marquis!" And then stepped aside, inviting her to enter with a casually elegant gesture of his arm.
Soleil, lowering her eyes, followed his unspoken command and hesitantly taking one step after the other and not making the smallest sound, she passed her new Master and entered into a lushly decorated hall. A fire was blazing in one of the fireplaces, warm, plush carpets covered the floors and pictures of far-away lands hung at the walls. Soleil stopped in the middle of the room, her naked feet sunk into the warm carpet and her tiny toes caressed the soft material.
"Turn around, child." Her Master said in his low unassuming voice and swallowing, Soleil obeyed. Her eyes cast to the floor, she stood before him, waiting. Waiting for her fate to show, for her death, her torture, her pain – but it didn't come.
The man took a few steps forward until he was close enough for her to smell the richness of his musky fragrance. His hand reached for her neck and the tips of his fingers danced on her cool skin, traced the line of her thin dress, and momentarily cupped her taut, pillowy breast. Soleil gasped and her eyes dared up to meet his in fear and confusion.
"You are beautiful."
In response, she cast her eyes down again, blushing, "You have been crying." He stated then, running his strong hand gently over her cheekbone.
"What is your name, child?" Taking her chin between his thumb and forefinger, he tilted her face upwards again until her wide brown eyes looked up into his.
"Soleil… my Lord." She whispered, ever more conscious of her bound hands, her naked body under the paper-thin dress and the closeness of her Master.
"Soleil." He spoke her name like he would taste good wine, probing the sound of it, letting it resonate on his tongue. It caused a warm shiver to run down her spine.
"Learn to live under my rule, Soleil, and you might not have anything to fear. Learn to yield, like your body is designed to yield, and you might even find happiness. Sometimes. While it lasts." His smile suddenly seemed a little melancholy, but only for a moment before he patted her cheek and ran his fingers through her lush, reddish brown hair and finally chuckled at her wide-eyed expression, so full of innocent confusion, fear and hope. "You'll do fine."
In a sharp motion, he turned away from her and clapped his hands together. Soleil started and looked around. A woman had appeared from behind a curtain. Her hair was white as snow even though she didn't seem older than fifty and she was still beautiful, thin and soft as a willow-tree and at a gesture, she stepped into the room and approached with an elegant gait. Her feet, too, were bare, her dress, rich green silk, melted softly against the skin. Once in front of him, she curtseyed and kissed her Master's hand.
"My Lord?" She asked, her voice was low, warm and feminine and though her face appeared docile at first glance, Soleil thought she detected a glimmer of ardent adoration for the man in front of her.
Master cupped her cheek and gave her gentle smile before he nodded towards Soleil.
"Prepare her, and then take her to the drawing room."