Can anyone help with ideas for my story?

[notquiteyet]

It's actually something I started writing a couple years ago, but now with some free time on my hands I'd like to finish up. My primary inspiration is Cheerleader Picture, (ninja turtle if you're reading this reply and I'll buy you a beer.) Other great inspirations are thumb and lorddare.

It deals with meeting a girl in college who has issues, and turning her into a slut. It's told in the first person, and is M/f style. I do want to keep it realistic/plausible. The story so far is about 13-17 pages depending on the font (just like college, ha ha ha) but I was hoping for some feedback, ideas for direction or where to lead it.

I don't know how comfortable I am posting my email address, but if you could post your age/sex and an email address, I'd be happy to mail it off.

[H Dean]

Why don't you post what you have here?

[notquiteyet]

I guess I'm just not ready to have it out in the open yet. I'm pretty vanilla in real life and was hoping to keep it private.

But really, I'd love the feedback if you're willing.

[H Dean]

You can e-mail it to me at hdean_667 at Yahoo.com

I can't give you a time line when I can have a look but it would probably be within a week or so of e-mailing it. Be sure to indicate that you are from the BDSM library so I actually read it. Just put it in-line and tell me what you are trying to figure out.

Dean (3rd Level Instructor)

[notquiteyet]

Sent!

[H Dean]

Don't be afraid to hound me a bit if I don't get to the story by the weekend. Sometimes I forget the stuff I want to get to.

[notquiteyet]

Haha ok, it's only Wednesday =)

[H Dean]

Sorry I haven't gotten to your story. I ended up having shoulder surgery and have been spending much of my time in a pained and drugged state. It's been hell.