Four_Letters
07-02-2010, 03:21 PM
Hi,
I'm currently working on a story based off of the hentai game Discipline, and I was wondering if my chapters and descriptions were long enough. I just got done with a sex scene in chapter 3, and I felt as if it were too short, though the sex in question is meant to be a quick screw.
http://www.bdsmlibrary.com/stories/chapter.php?storyid=8273&chapterid=26291 Here is the story in question. If anyone can offer me advice, either refer back to this thread, or just drop a comment in the comment section.
I'm currently working on a story based off of the hentai game Discipline, and I was wondering if my chapters and descriptions were long enough. I just got done with a sex scene in chapter 3, and I felt as if it were too short, though the sex in question is meant to be a quick screw.
http://www.bdsmlibrary.com/stories/chapter.php?storyid=8273&chapterid=26291 Here is the story in question. If anyone can offer me advice, either refer back to this thread, or just drop a comment in the comment section.