Editor required!

[Athenna]

Well,

What can i say more than to say that, english is not my first language. And so at times i face troubles writing such in english.

I'd very well be gald if someone is willing to help me out with it!

thanks. And this is the story (http://www.bdsmlibrary.com/stories/story.php?storyid=3789) .

Do contact me on my mail, for further discussion.

Athenna.

[Sean Malone]

I have looked at your story and I see what you mean. You do need a little help. I will send you a message about this.

[bimmie]

i'd love to help, if you give me your email address, i'll give it a go and send it to you!

[RobynsVeil]

Well,

What can i say more than to say that, english is not my first language. And so at times i face troubles writing such in english.

I'd very well be gald if someone is willing to help me out with it!

thanks. And this is the story (http://www.bdsmlibrary.com/stories/story.php?storyid=3789) .

Do contact me on my mail, for further discussion.

Athenna.
May I ask, what *is* your first language? The story is articulately written, and begs polishing. I'm happy to try, if it hasn't already been worked on by someone else.

Cheers,
Robyn

[hellbentforleatherr]

Athenna,

There are flourishes of tour native langauges in your writing. May I suggest that is not a fault, but that it can add even more interest to the story. Rather than have all of your personality edited our, and reducing it to a vanilla us/english, I recommend that you simply add a sentence or two saying that english is a second language and saying what your language is. I think the story would also be very fun to hear spoken in englist with the accent of your native language.

[hellbentforleatherr]

Robyn,

I like your avitar's experssion. Is that one of your poser works?

Hellbentforleatherr

[agmlb95]

I like this story. It has a rare eroticism and tenderness. I'd love to try to edit it for you.