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drake7
07-12-2003, 05:13 PM
Whew, the last post was from May?

I'll toss a new post in here and perhaps it will let some of the moths escape and knock a bit o' dust off the shelves here.

"Taking Carol" has been a very good story. I really have enjoyed all the various elements the author has been able to incorporate. The only thing I personally would like to see, yes call me old fashioned, is a bit more M/f type interaction- or perhaps MF/f. I don't know how this might be added in, but it is something I would enjoy reading if the author is able to incorporate it.

-Drake.

Mobius
07-23-2003, 12:33 PM
There is thousands of M/f erotic fiction in the library.
The Taking carol has been a fav of mine because of the lack of the "standard "Male dom" Yawn" sorry very boring.

Love the Strong Female v sub female.

The only problem with the story is it is not going any where at the moment. Where is the climax sorry pun intended.

Do something shocking to carol or candy.

Give her something irreversible like huge breast or have her lower ribs removed. Give her a lobotomy. make her a sex zombie.
Give her a huge nose ring. Cut her tendons so she can only crawl.
Just do some thing.

But the constant Carol submitting to her owner is frankly getting boring.

Sorry I love the story and I hope it continues

I only wish I could write as well as you

Critics criticize because they can not write.

a fan

Lorddare
02-27-2004, 09:39 PM
Thanks for your comments. It was nice to find Taking Carol discussed in the forum. I hope you are happy with how it ends.
Lorddare:)