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Widget
07-15-2006, 09:14 AM
This one was rated as the most voted. Personaly I have no idea why as I found it hard to read and I never finished it. Too many grammer errors and I didn't care for the writing style. Thougths on why this one got so much attention ?

http://www.bdsmlibrary.com/stories/story.php?storyid=1785


Janet's Ordeal by Master Mick


Story Codes: M/f+ M+/f M+/f+ F+/f F+/f+ S/M slavery historical humiliation torture Heavy violent

Synopsis: Janet is a courier during World War II. She is caught and first she is put into some really severe interrogation. When all this is done the Commandant decide to transfer her to a very cruel training block for female slaves. Here she is subjected to the most cruel, humiliating and painful treatment thinkable. The story is a role-play meaning it is written by a woman named janet and I.

Tojo
07-27-2006, 05:32 AM
I suspect no one has posted on this thread as they were reluctant to criticise someone who's just trying to entertain.

Seriously, I thought it was awful what I read. I managed the first page or two then skipped ahead. I couldn't read more than 3 or 4 pages.

It's the kind of topic I could maybe get into, but the way it was written was very poor.

Why did it get so much attention? Maybe the subject material & the story codes??

Tojo

Widget
07-27-2006, 07:42 AM
Well this corner is not just about posting stories to criticize them, there are stories I have posted that i liked too. People are more than welcome to post something of their own that they like and let us know why.

It is a forum for discussion and maybe if any authors would like some more direct feedback they can post their story link here too. :D

Dick the Slaver
07-27-2006, 11:46 AM
I began reading this story and found the first chapter interesting. I kept on reading till the story became rediculous and stopped reading. I would have enjoyed more if they were using torture equipment available during WW2.