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Uncle_Ed
08-27-2006, 10:00 AM
Young girl sits alone in the depths of the night
Young face lit up by the flickering light.
She has her computer and she lives on-line,
her life in suspension with no sense of time.

Now three in the morning the ebb-tide of her soul,
Her mind is fragmented, long time since it's been whole
She looked in at the internet, looking for a cure
For the angst of her teen years, the web sites proved a lure.

She signed into the chatrooms who'd opened up their door
It was easy as she lied to them, said she was twenty-four.
To get in and to flirt was all that really mattered.
She'd been dazzled; she'd been charmed; she'd been deceived and flattered.

Her man had been quite clever and knew just what to say,
He'd thrown open wide his arms and then begged her to stay.
He seemed so real and witty, so pleasant and so kind
While stealing at her will, her soul while messing with her mind.

Young girl sits alone tears dried upon her face.
Her skin is cold and pale for she's gone now from this place.
The pressures he placed on her young mind proving far too much
Oh-how hypnotic his words were-how subtle was his touch.

She could not live without him. She could not tell him no.
So she made up her mind she would give up and go.
She's logged off from life now. The pain has gone away.
Her mind broke like the dawn at the begining of that day.


I'm getting used to poems appearing in my mind almost fully-formed as this one did this morning. They are about things that move and concern me.

Please come and join in the chatroom discussion I will be hosting about on-line abuse of subs-the chatroom here at 10:00 pm British Summer Time on September 10th.

Radiance
08-27-2006, 11:54 AM
oh my,how true is that poem,wow.thanks for sharing Sir

Timberwolf
08-27-2006, 11:59 AM
Very good poem Uncle_Ed.

MsUther
08-27-2006, 12:04 PM
Thats a horrible story, and most of all I fear its true for some.
Its hard to find the positive words now, cause the dread sits put in me.
But a very well written poem this is.

violetgem
08-27-2006, 12:13 PM
all I can really say is WOW, that was too good for me to even comment on

Silke
08-27-2006, 02:27 PM
oh damn, that's incredibly scary...*shudders*

Desperadosong
09-12-2006, 01:30 PM
Very good and such an important message as well. Thank you for sharing!!

Ds

Talia
09-12-2006, 01:41 PM
Wondering how I missed this one....Uncle Ed...as usual your writings always keep me spellbound. This one more so. Wonderful work.

SB

slaveangel{HM}
09-16-2006, 06:16 PM
*sighs* it is a wonderful poem, it does speak of a shattering truth...

cookiecat
09-20-2006, 09:15 AM
this is a powerful & thought-provoking poem.... thanks uncle ed for sharing it.

Warbaby1943
09-21-2006, 07:31 AM
Ed as usual you say remarkable things and it all seems to make sense in one way or the other. This one is very thought provoking, I must say, and very well written.

Confessor_Ed
09-21-2006, 09:35 AM
A thousand thoughts passed through me while reading that. Shattering is all I can manage to say at this time.
Thank you for sharing
Confessor Ed.

Echoes
10-11-2006, 12:51 AM
This sent shivers down my back and is so sad, yet so easily true and scary.
Thank you for sharing this...a wonderful and powerful poem.

frankee
10-11-2006, 03:24 PM
Uncle _Ed,

i'm speechless...those were incredibly powerful words.

Uncle_Ed
01-24-2007, 09:04 AM
I'm commenting on my own poem to bring to the fore again. This is a subject that we should all keep firmly in mind...

tessa
01-25-2007, 01:48 PM
I'm commenting on my own poem to bring to the fore again.

Thank you for doing just that. An important thought for us all.

TheDeSade
01-25-2007, 07:29 PM
very well done Ed . . . . . I think it speaks to all of us in a chilling way. Anyone who has been around the net for any length of time has in some way been affected by something similar.

orchidsoul
01-25-2007, 08:45 PM
A frightening and well written poem. You really struck a chord.

Sadly, it can be all too true...

annie
02-07-2007, 10:00 AM
Well done Ed... makes me wonder if this shouldn't be sticked in the BDSM Life section or something as a reminder of the dangerous that lurk.