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slaveangel{HM}
09-22-2006, 07:12 PM
My soul searches restlessly
Knowing that deep inside there is silence

Wandering aimlessly in a busy existence
My mind frantic with work and life
Am lost in a crowd of people
Afraid to breathe, yet wanting to speak

Longing for someone who will
Understand my needs
Nurture my heart and willingness

Feeling unfulfilled and empty
Merely a shadow of who I am
Lacking the confidence to talk

I do not wish to become a mindless puppet
I want to grow, blossom and smile
Breaking the shackles of silence
From a few kind words and a loving hand

~A

*I wrote this poem a few minutes ago, so it probably needs further editing.
Those were my thoughts at the time so I thought I'd share.

Talia
09-22-2006, 07:17 PM
WoW...you put into words everything I've been trying to say in all my other poems...Wonderful job.

slaveangel{HM}
09-22-2006, 07:21 PM
WoW...you put into words everything I've been trying to say in all my other poems...Wonderful job.

Really? Thankyou for your feedback hugsss

I still think it is a jumbled mess, but...

Although the difference I think here is that these thoughts I posted were in my head at the time, it is natural poetry...If I decided to read it back and edit it, I might have lost my original meaning. hmmm not sure if I am making sense...lol

Talia
09-22-2006, 07:26 PM
You do..you do make sense...My Literature teacher told me, "Don't over work it." You didn't it's just right..if you ask me!