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elyse
09-30-2006, 08:24 AM
this poem, a French kyrielle, was part of a writing exercise called Iron Poet. A friend gave me three mystery words -- Master, love, climax -- and i wrote the poem around the words.

offertory

For love of Thee, I offer all
in answer to Thy quiet call
Thy plaything will I gladly be
if, Master, such might pleasure Thee.

In saucy skirt, or frock demure
emboldened by my thoughts impure
I drape, just so, across Thy knee
if, Master, such might pleasure Thee.

Sweet climax, at Thy whim, denied
while, limbs stretched taut, soft thighs spread wide,
I moan and writhe for all to see
if, Master, such might pleasure Thee.

I serve Thee at Thy brusque command;
lie pliant 'neath Thy teasing hand
for this night, or eternity
if, Master, such might pleasure Thee.

- elyse
Warbaby1943
09-30-2006, 08:42 AM
elyse that was nice and I still look forward to more of your work. Thanks for posting.
lily27
09-30-2006, 08:49 AM
Wow, that is excellent. What an introduction.

Welcome to the forums - we are thrilled to have you. And please keep sharing.
fuktoimaso
09-30-2006, 08:53 AM
Elyse, I love it...

Post more!
Ozme52
09-30-2006, 01:32 PM
if, Master, such might pleasure Thee.


Outstanding. A powerful phrase of power exchange. Sweet.


An interesting form for an erotic poem, considering the origin of the format. :rolleyes: I like it!!!
Timberwolf
09-30-2006, 01:45 PM
I definitly loved it. Thanks a lot for posting your poem.
frankee
10-01-2006, 07:03 AM
Incredible, elyse. i look forward to reading more:)
elyse
10-01-2006, 09:02 AM
Outstanding. A powerful phrase of power exchange. Sweet.


An interesting form for an erotic poem, considering the origin of the format. :rolleyes: I like it!!!

thank you!

oh, a fellow traveler who knows the origins of the kyrielle! hail and well met! yes, the juxtaposition of form and content was quite intentional:)
mina
10-01-2006, 07:02 PM
Lovely poem, I saved it :)
Talia
10-02-2006, 08:14 PM
Incredible, Wonderful, Outstanding, Excellent...all fit this poem. I am a follower of your writtings now...please...I hope you continue to post. You have me hooked.
Woogsbie
10-11-2006, 09:43 PM
very sensual poem, elyse. Imagines the poet is, as well.
Echoes
10-18-2006, 07:05 AM
this is absolutely beautiful