The Blossom Tree~

[slaveangel{HM}]

This was a poetry exercise given to me by elyse.

The three words were: blossom, mandolin and winter.

Note this is my first time doing something like this so feel free to tear this to pieces. *smiles*


I am roused from my slumber
The rays of the sun
Peeking through my window
Not wanting to leave my cocoon
The frost masking my view
Of the ghostly winter
That penetrates my soul

I step outside, confronted by the cold
Braced against the railing I smile
Remembering what it was like
Basking in the sunshine
Smelling the fragrant scents
Of the old blossom tree

Watching with a sudden sadness
The skeleton of the tree
Without its sweet blossoms
Pain constricting my heart
Blanketed in snow
No flowers or green fields in sight

I remember a time fondly
When under the old blossom tree
A dear friend would play
His sweet mandolin
The melodies reminded me
Of times long ago
When I was happy and free
Dancing with a flowing dress
Chains of flowers entwined in my hair
Laughing as if nothing could tear me apart
Carried by the rhythm of the mandolin

[elyse]

lovely... very evocative. you've really captured the power of sense memory.

i'm so *proud* of you!!!

[slaveangel{HM}]

lovely... very evocative. you've really captured the power of sense memory.

i'm so *proud* of you!!!

*beams* It isn't often I get such positive feedback from my poems. To hear such words of praise from you, a wonder poet yourself, it humbles me. Thankyou.

[Timberwolf]

Lovely work. I see between those two above me that the ranks of the talented are swelling in these parts. :)

[Sir_G]

Lovely work. I see between those two above me that the ranks of the talented are swelling in these parts. :)

Couldn't agree more Timber. Angel is not only talented she is an aussie. Go angel. *blushes* Oops cheerleading here. :rolleyes:

[slaveangel{HM}]

Lovely work. I see between those two above me that the ranks of the talented are swelling in these parts. :)


Oh my the first time I read your response I was reading it in metaphor *giggles* I need to get my little innocent mind out of the gutter.

Thankyou so much for your feedback. I love reading poetry just as much as I find joy in writing it. This is a wonderful place to be.

[slaveangel{HM}]

Couldn't agree more Timber. Angel is not only talented she is an aussie. Go angel. *blushes* Oops cheerleading here. :rolleyes:


Nothing wrong with a Dom waving a few pom poms Gooooooo Team Gooooo

Smiles at the visual stimulus -----------> :cheerlead


Errmm...before I get into trouble...this might suit you more *giggles* -----> :gooday: