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moptop
11-10-2006, 08:55 AM
Written as a song really, adapted slightly for just words


The ones with the innocent eyes are the worst
(or maybe they’re better)
They stare in blind surprise when you talk dirt
(maybe they’re better)

See her, with the long blond hair?
She looks sweet, but she won’t play fair
She seems angelic, but it’s just a snare

The ones with the innocent eyes are the worst
(or maybe they’re better)

There’s one, with dark green eyes
She looks nice, but you’d be surprised
She seems timid, but she’s not inside

(maybe they’re better)

Admire her, with the perfect skin
She seems unblemished, but she’s not within
She looks pure, but she smiles at sin

Look out! You can’t see them move
They look naïve, but their looks confuse
They seem simple, but they soon bemuse

The ones with the innocent eyes are the worst
(or maybe they’re better)

TheDeSade
11-10-2006, 09:53 AM
Interesting. I would love to hear it with the music.

Timberwolf
11-10-2006, 10:40 AM
I like it a lot. :)

moptop
11-10-2006, 10:56 AM
Thanks, TW.

Well, TDS, as a song first it's sort of a moody repetitive slightly monotone but steady fairly heavy slow sexy hip swinging walk groove. With sharp stabs/breaks just after see her/there's one, etc. Bit difficult to describe further!

Echoes
11-11-2006, 06:30 PM
a song has a subtle change than with poetry and music and tone often aid in helping the understand, the flow of words. I have always had difficulty helping when it comes to a song and truly wish I could. I too would love to hear the music to this

softest hugs
~echoes~

TheDeSade
11-11-2006, 07:15 PM
yeah . . what echoes said. . . . I move that moptop record it, digitize it and send it to us.

moptop
11-11-2006, 07:41 PM
Ummmm... not sure I have adequate equipment... equally, inadequate accompaniment (only me)... ummmm... will think about it. Probably for quite a long time.

Might choose something different to record instead anyway if I did. So there!