hush

[Echoes]

here is one to help please. I am not sure the form, it was originally wrote 3 years ago for a contest and I thought it to be an Interlocked Bob...so searching tomorrow I go. I did however work on this more tonight, thinking a few lines still stick out rawly.

Hush (Terzanelle)

Hush he said with whispered hand
petals drawn gently from my heart
then calm he puckered every strand

with love he tendered tears apart
countered shadows to embered grace
petals drawn gently from my heart

words sooth a quiet ravaged face
dusted clouds bared trembling cries
countered shadows to embered grace

cast hearts to bleary eyes arise
what sleeping creature beauty plays
dusted clouds bared trembling cries

tears of joy rejoice wanton displays
your love a flame at modest tend
what sleeping creature beauty plays

we folded time with sunset blend
hush he said with whispered hand
your love a flame at modest tend
then calm he puckered every strand

[moptop]

See my mail, echoes. Is this the one TDS fed back to you on separately, too?

[Echoes]

See my mail, echoes. Is this the one TDS fed back to you on separately, too?
? I need to go to sleep, my mind is befuddled and sputtering question marks all over the place...no one has given comments of this one except you now which I shall have to go look.