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vampyres{ID}
11-12-2006, 01:36 PM
Begging, please consume me,
Waiting, the spider and the fly,
Struggling never to be free,
Tangling myself to comply.

Bend me to do your will,
Break me with your pain,
I beg of you to kill me,
To create my life again.

Cold steal against the skin,
The flow of liquid fire,
Deepest Crimson upon your chin,
Agony sends me higher.

I beg again, please take me,
Smiling, you say not yet,
Sound of a belt coming free,
Now Scream for me my pet.

This probley isn't all that good most of my poems are from depression or (My good ones) about politics. This is my first attempt at anything sexual. Feel free to offer advice ( I started this last night and finished it this morning so it is relitively new and I haven't really read it to myself that much, so I am not even sure how it sounds aloud)

Sir_G
11-12-2006, 05:27 PM
I like this poem a lot. It has such a lovely dark quality to it and communicates the need and desire of both subjects so well.

The best poetry is more often than not born out of strong emotions like depression and desire and I think you've done exceptionally well. More please!

vampyres{ID}
11-12-2006, 06:14 PM
Thank you very much :) I will be posting more (I am constantly writing something or another)

Timberwolf
11-12-2006, 11:54 PM
I like it, it's intense and the rythym is solid. But the main point to me is always does it make me feel anything, and I definitely enjoy what this makes me feel.

SheepishJaina
11-12-2006, 11:56 PM
Lovely poem :)

Suddenly I am yearning...

vampyres{ID}
11-13-2006, 12:10 AM
thank you all very much, it is an honor to get compliments here so much talent. :)

Radiance
11-14-2006, 10:54 PM
Excellent

mina
11-14-2006, 10:58 PM
Fuckin sexy!!! The two middle verses... oh my god, loved them!!

SheepishJaina
11-14-2006, 11:50 PM
*nods at mina* ohh yes, a very HOT mental image from that

poetic_justice
11-15-2006, 03:51 AM
A truly beautiful piece of art vampyres.

slaveangel{HM}
11-15-2006, 04:36 AM
Wow...an amazing piece. Thankyou so much for sharing this with us.

moptop
11-15-2006, 05:29 AM
And I just loved that last verse... oh, the belt... mmmm

frankee
11-15-2006, 11:24 AM
Fucking hot!!

Can't wait to read more!

vampyres{ID}
11-17-2006, 11:08 PM
Thank you all for the compliments :)

_ID_
12-30-2006, 02:21 PM
Yes lovely indeed
and one day soon I will make you bleed
our minds intertwining
our souls combining

one day soon my little one
one day soon...

Darkmagi
04-17-2007, 02:40 PM
Dark, enchanting, and very very good.