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Timberwolf
11-12-2006, 11:37 PM
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I bear no sign
Or name, or bruise
I bear no sign
That I’ve been used

I want the sting
Upon my skin
I want the sting
To come again

I feel so dirty
Make me clean again?
Don’t leave me this way
Don’t leave me unmarked

I’ve got no pain
From small red welts
I’ve got no pain
Like I once felt

I want to prove
That I am yours
I want to prove
That I’m your whore

I feel so dirty
Make me clean again?
Don’t leave me this way
Don’t leave me unmarked

Don’t leave me unmarked

lily27
11-12-2006, 11:40 PM
Oooooo....I like this. A lot. Makes me also want marks.

Very much reminds me of when I *need* to be in sub-mode. I like it a lot.

Timberwolf
11-12-2006, 11:41 PM
Thanks a lot angel. :)

poetic_justice
11-13-2006, 12:04 AM
WOW

I love this Timberwolf, its amazingly written :)

vampyres{ID}
11-13-2006, 12:06 AM
Very good poem (Think Ill be saying this alot, this place has some good tallent)

Timberwolf
11-13-2006, 12:07 AM
Thank you very much p_j, I'm glad you loved it. :)

And thanks vampyres too, always good to know that new people are coming in and enjoying what we've got here too.

SheepishJaina
11-13-2006, 01:04 AM
Ohhh I love this Twolf.

I can see a few meanings in this. Were they intended?

Timberwolf
11-13-2006, 01:10 AM
Glad you loved it, and as for the multiple meanings aside from the physical there is an element I went for of the mental mark a partner leaves on someone as well. Though mainly I at least wrote it thinking about marking itself, and the psycological impact of it for me.

moptop
11-13-2006, 01:28 AM
I really love this, too TW. As sheepish says, there are several levels it can be understood at, so I think each reader will be able to feel a relevance to themselves, to their own experience, even if that is not the same relevance as to the writer. And that makes a powerful poem, if it can speak in a different language to all. I love the change in rhythm, too. Accentuates the plea.

Timberwolf
11-13-2006, 01:31 AM
Thank you moptop, I'm glad you found relevance in it, and that you enjoyed it.

MsUther
11-13-2006, 10:17 AM
This poem made me all gello and mush inside. They described much of how I feel myself.
Your words are so bare and raw, and to me they create a longing and a sorrow that borders desperation. I loved your poem Timberwolf. Thank you so much for sharing it.

Timberwolf
11-13-2006, 10:22 AM
If I've made you all mushy inside my lady, it was a good day. ;)

MsUther
11-13-2006, 10:31 AM
*swoons and mushes*
;)

frankee
11-15-2006, 11:25 AM
*sigh* Incredible and awesome Tw!!

Always enjoy your writing!

Timberwolf
11-15-2006, 12:37 PM
Thanks very much frankee, glad you liked it.

Echoes
11-17-2006, 05:25 PM
this is beautiful TimberWolf...achingly beautiful. Thank you

Valkyrie402
11-25-2006, 07:34 PM
The marks are there, Timberwolf........I can hear them echoing in your soul...........beautiful...

Talia
11-25-2006, 07:44 PM
Timberwolf...that was amazing...

Timberwolf
11-25-2006, 08:20 PM
Thank you Echoes, Valkyrie, and Talia for all your kind words. They are appreciated. :)

TheDeSade
11-25-2006, 09:39 PM
TW. This is a really good piece of work. I like the way it goes together. It really doesn't do much for me as a Dom, but I can see how it would speak to a submissive personality .. especially one with a bit of a pain thing going on. Well done

Timberwolf
11-25-2006, 10:10 PM
Thank you very much TheDeSade.

elyse
11-26-2006, 09:29 AM
powerful stuff, Twolf.

I bear no sign
that i've been used

we all bear marks, of course -- it's just that most of them aren't visible to the naked eye. And we sometimes need those outward signs -- visible, tangible evidence that this is more than mere fantasy.

this is my brain on ramble mode.... sorry... loved the poem, Twolf... i'll be quiet now...

Timberwolf
11-27-2006, 11:49 AM
You make a good point about the marks inside... I think we all have our share. I'm glad you loved the poem. :)