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Echoes
11-21-2006, 06:22 PM
what is this feeling, safe?
Is it strong arms around me
surrounding in embrace?
Is it a soft as look,
fluttered caress,
stroke of face?
A shield, body
covering mine?
What is this feeling,
this…
a questing of something
I do not know,
endeavored sensation
just beyond my reach.
Untouchable,
unexplainable,
indescribable,
so how can one learn
what is missed
yet has not felt?
TheDeSade
11-21-2006, 06:26 PM
Well. . . you are on a roll tonight! ANother winner. . . .
(check this line stoke of face?
should that be stroke?)
Echoes
11-21-2006, 06:46 PM
thank you TDS, yes it was a spelling mistake
moptop
11-25-2006, 06:23 AM
Hiya hun - FINALLY get round to being able to read your posts! I won't gush, because you know I love your writing, just to say that this starts with a soft and whimsical sound and rythm, which seems to flow with the thoughts of safety, calm, and then you change the rythm to be more- oh, what, intransigent, not soft - as you question and show your own seeking, a sense of frustration coming in. Well, hey, I guess I'm gushing a bit again.
"Is it a soft as look,"
doesn't make sense in English, I think - "Is it a soft look", "Is it as soft as a look" - make sense to me, maybe I'm not understanding?
Echoes
11-27-2006, 12:59 PM
wups thank you moptop, I do have to be careful of placement of words oftentimes thinking backwards.
soft hugs
Guest 91108
11-27-2006, 03:50 PM
I like it Echoes. thanks for sharing.
Echoes
11-27-2006, 04:58 PM
Thank you for your kind words Wolf
Valkyrie402
12-02-2006, 08:59 PM
Different..... I like it very much.