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Dragon's muse
05-01-2007, 05:32 AM
is there a sound

when one mind touches another?

when the thoughts
stretch across miles
across time
across an apparently unbridgeable chasm
across unimagined obstacles

obstacles of this world
and
other worlds

it should be as a clap
of thunder. . .
or a bell tolling in the still air of
the first morning of time. . .

a momentous event deserves a momentous sound

the touch of two minds
two hearts
two souls

should make such
a cacophony
that Beethoven’s Ninth
would seem but a whisper in comparison.

there should be
a light so bright that
the sun would die of shame
for her pitiful display

why is there nothing
but the quiet whisper of a sigh
and the tolling of one single word

Inevitable

jeanne
05-01-2007, 05:39 AM
"...but the quiet whisper of a sigh..."

Nice phrase, not sure why I like it, but I really do.

Rhabbi
05-01-2007, 08:27 AM
lovely and very compelling. The imagery that you invoke is compelling.

Dragon's muse
05-02-2007, 09:07 AM
Again, thank you both for your kind words.
~blushing and scurrying away~

^firefly^
05-02-2007, 09:17 AM
Dragon's muse,

I really like this poem...you capture that elusive "connection" in such vivid images...I especially love the contrast between the "volume" of the mental connection versus what is actually heard/said. Excellent!
(And I'm sorry for not commenting earlier...I meant to when I first read the poem, and the forgot to come back and leave a comment.)

Dragon's muse
05-05-2007, 07:46 PM
Dragon's muse,

I really like this poem...you capture that elusive "connection" in such vivid images...I especially love the contrast between the "volume" of the mental connection versus what is actually heard/said. Excellent!
(And I'm sorry for not commenting earlier...I meant to when I first read the poem, and the forgot to come back and leave a comment.)

Thank you, then i said what i wanted to say. It doesn't always work that way, but i am glad that it did this time.

rose