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gladgirl
05-02-2007, 01:20 PM
Life
It frightens me
But I embrace it
And then let it go
Frightened it might not feel the same
Then it holds my hand
Until I have the courage again
Death
It frightens me
When will it come again?
So many questions to ask
Who will it take from me
this time
I want to grab hold of it
Crush it between my hands
But it is ellusive
A cool breeze
It touches me
But I cannot knock it down

^firefly^
05-03-2007, 07:24 AM
gladgirl,

Another great poem. I really liked this part:

"So many questions to ask
Who will it take from me
this time"

Those line breaks were incredibly effective, hit hard. I really, really enjoyed this one. The conflict in the speaker is very easy to relate to.

*hugs* can't wait to read more!

Rhabbi
05-03-2007, 10:41 AM
I am truly impressed with the quality of your poetry, when are we going to see a contribution to the contests?

ashsoul
05-12-2007, 11:36 AM
I liked it too mostly because of the theme and besides for the realist point of view in it. There are indeed much more questions than answers. Thinking about death is indeed frightening and there is even a question hidden in this fear: why do we fear death? The burden of being comes clearly into consciousness only when one tries to understand it`s lack.