Great!
I though you - oops I mean Y/you "forgot" all about it :D
mmmm Alexa mmmm ;)
Pejanon
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Great!
I though you - oops I mean Y/you "forgot" all about it :D
mmmm Alexa mmmm ;)
Pejanon
lol - how could i forget about it? actually Phil takes little to do with the story these days apart from being terribly practical and saying things like "she must be double-jointed to do that" or "well, by the time they finished they'd be crippled" and other such comments...Quote:
Originally Posted by pejanon
...i haveto confess i got seriously stuck and couldn't see how the storyline might work. feedback (both good and bad) and suggestions have really made the difference. i also got into the trap of re-writing and re-re-re-re-re-writing until i couldn't see the story properly. i was told by another Author here to "let it go" and i did...and the sky didn't fall down LOL
i hope to have ch 14 in a workable format very soon but it is, of course subject to change least by the characters T/themselves!
Hey, I used to write those never ending comics and I LOVED complicated plots and messed up charaters(those are the best lol) and after you just drafted half of it you come up with this great idea :rolleyes: you want to string throught the main plot and then it's back to sketches and some more rewriting and ....gaaaah! Yep I know how it goes. Yep let it go (nothing will fall :p ) - the stories do not have to be joined perfectly.
mmmm
Oh yeah thanx for the nice scene offered in reply to my ahm review.
Have fun
Pej
... and then there is alexa ROFWL
just finished re-drafting chapter 14 of EWD but i had to split it becasue its too long (sorry!) so i think this one's coming in at 15 chapters altogether.
thanks VERY much for the feedback and encouragement :)
umm there's been a problem with the posting of the chapters and i've re-sent chapters 14 and 15 of Encounter With Destiny to Jinn Sir to sort this out - i'm very sorry and grateful also to the ppl who took their time to point out the inconsistent "jump" between parts of the plot
i hope it works out this time!
thank You again, Jinn Sir, for Your patience and for fixing the end of Encounter With Destiny - You're the BESTEST!!!
i'm working on Harvest of Tears (the 3rd part of the Alexa Trilogy) and i'm not sure if i've got things right with a major character. Rosario is a Domme and She is breaking a maid to become Her personal slave...but i have absolutely no idea what its like to dominate (except on the receiving end) and my Beloved Master says He can't help with how a Female Dominant might behave
so please, Ma'am or Mistress, if You are willing to read over a rough draft and advise this humble slave, please get intouch with me ruthiesb69@yahoo.com or with my Beloved Master philmackay@talk21.com
thank You
i was really, REALLY struggling with chapter 7 of 'Harvest Of Tears' - i simply couldn't emotionally relate to the female Dominant, Rosario. i realize i was writing Her as a theatrical, over-the-top 'Pantomime Domme' who sought others' approval rather than living on Her terms! it was hopeless and my Beloved Master wasn't much use either (please forgive me, Master!), saying "It will be different for women - find a Domme and ask Her opinion''. so i did via this forum, and i'm VERY glad that Mistress Ranai kindly came forward to offer Her advice :)
Mistress Ranai has re-crafted Rosario into such a formidable, credible Domme that i would readily kneel before Her, if i wasn't already owned in real life LOL!
i wanted to record my gratitude, in particular to Mistress Ranai, and to all the O/other people who have taken the trouble to review and contact me with ideas and advice. Y/you have no idea how valuable this help can be to a novice writer!
please keep telling the A/authors on this site what Y/you like and dislike, what works and what needs to be changed. it's not about praise (although that's very nice to receive) but about learning and sharing O/our love of BDSM :)
Nik the Writ Deejay is playing Sunshine of Your Love by Cream in the background....Quote:
Originally Posted by slave ruthie
Personally Ruthie, I give you a lot of credit for sticking with the chapter until you were satisfied with the result. Will you give us a heads up when you submit it for posting? I'll make time for it on my dance card. :D
And Mistress Ranai, I have another thing to thank you for. I'm sure it will not be the last time, either. ;)
Nikita
"Will you give us a heads up when you submit it for posting?"
i submitted it and a slightly amended chapter 6 today, nikita :)
so now we have to wait?
aww grrrrr...
Ok some say patience is a virtue - and am neither :D
:) to you slave ruthie
(me wait....)
Pej
if A/anyone wants an advanced copy as a .txt or .doc or .pdf, write to me at ruthiesb69@yahoo.com :)Quote:
Originally Posted by pejanon
You’re welcome, it’s been great fun to be allowed to take a look and offer suggestions. Especially to an author who creates suspense and takes her readers through emotional turmoil like you do. :)
dear Mistress Ranai
O/our chapter has been added but doesn't appear yet in the list of updates - its here at http://www.bdsmlibrary.com/stories/c...hapterid=15894
i hope people like Rosario - i think She's wonderful!:)
Dear Ruthie:
I have been remiss in not thanking you for an advance copy of your latest update. Rosario is indeed an addicting character, one that I hope you continue, even 'spin off.'
Looking forward to more of your stories and updates, Ruthie.
Music in background..."The Game of Love" by Michelle Branch
Can you hear it?
"Tell me...."
Nikita
It’s nice to see the story’s continuation out in the open.
I think Rosario is now on my ‘Crime bosses I would like to have breakfast with’ list.
Thank you very much for sharing your talent with us all!
Given the obvious Veru_Skjava/slave ruthie mutual adoration etc., it should be duly noted that slave ruthie is indeed a fine author and contirbutor. Whatever her/he/it's future becomes it is well warranted by the fine writing and by V_S's unflagging support.
Faibhar
Veru_Skjava and i are close friends who share a bond (pun intenteded!) of submission. she and i are linked through a wonderful Domme who guides us online :)Quote:
Originally Posted by Faibhar
i'm such a fan of Your work, Faibhar, that Your calling me a fine author is to me great praise - thank You very much!
as to my future, it will remain as a "her" (checks her anatomy for signs of changes - nope, still the same bits as before lol)
i'm sorry for the long pauses between chapters but i've got myself abit stuck with Harvest of Tears - i have the ending, i ahve most of the build-up worked out (still getting research so if A/anyone reading this is a lawyer with experience of the criminal courts in New York State, pleeeeeeeeeeease would You help me sort out the procedure during Arraignments???), but there are soem inconsistent threads that i need to deal with and it either means re-writing earlier chapters or extending the planned length to make everything fit properly (sigh).
anyway, thank You Faibhar and any wise counsel would be much appreciated!
The pleasure is all mine, and of many others. Congratulations for your works and social contacts. Best of luck with all.
Faibhar
abject apologies for the length of time between chapters but i ahve submitted HOFT8 for adding to the Library - if A/anyone wants an advanced copy please let me know :)
Count me in Ruthie! *kiss*Quote:
Originally Posted by slave ruthie
Nikita
could you email me at ruthiesb69@yahoo.com so's i can send u hoft8, nikki? i can't find your addy...Quote:
Originally Posted by nikita
Since you are offering I would love advance copy of HOFT8...
my yahoo adress is in my profile...
thank you
Pejanon
i just submitted chapters 9 & 10 of Harvest of Tears :) once again, i'm deeply in Mistress Ranai's debt for Her guidance on revisions.
if ppl want advance copies, pls mail me at ruthiesb69@yahoo.com
thanks
ruthie[Phil]
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Just want to add my admiration for this series.
Thanks for all the effort
thank you, kaleun76, its very encouraging that P/people enjoy the story and are willing to share T/their views!Quote:
Originally Posted by kaleun76
its only fair to point out that the tale of Alexa has been guided and amended by more than just me - Ranai, veru skjava, the original Master Charles (now deceased), Master Gary Roberts (the BDSM artist), and of course my Beloved Master Phil, and many others have ALL made great contributions with T/their ideas and comments :)
just to illustrate the process, i was totally stuck again at the end of the bit where Master Charles was struggling between executing Alexa and letting down the Organization. i couldn't see past this point. my Beloved Master made a simple comment..."if it was me, I'd be very angry". and that was the answer!!! so i just HAD to get back out of bed and start typing LOL
at last i got over my writer's block and completed chapter 12 of HofT! not as umm "strong" as other chapters perhaps but it makes soem links that will help later on :)
Oh, I can't wait to read the next chapter, even if it is not as "strong" as the others. They have all been just wonderful so far.
I have to say, it was stories like yours that inspired me to start giving writing a go myself. Thank you for that.
Aussiegirl
if i've encouraged you to start writing i'm delighted and very honoured - that's one of the nicest things i've been told :)Quote:
Originally Posted by Aussiegirl1
i submitted ch12 of HOFT quite recently so Rabbit1 may not have had the chance to do anything with it yet...if you really can't wait, mail me at ruthiesb69@yahoo.com and i'll send you an advanced copy ;)
Oh, you really did inspire me. I remember when I started on my first story, the style and feel of your Organisational series was what I aimed for. I just loved the way your characters interacted and showed real emotions. I have always tried to do the same and so far, it has worked for me too.Quote:
if i've encouraged you to start writing i'm delighted and very honoured - that's one of the nicest things i've been told
I will be happy to wait for the story to come onto the site, but thank you for the offer! If you had not already sent it in to Rabbit, I certainly would have been taking you up on your kind offer.
Aussiegirl
hihi
Tiger kindly added chapter 12 to Harvest of Tears but i noticed the paragraph spacing is very wide. i've written to Him to see if He wants the file re-sent. and there is a load of duplicate stuff at the end of chapter 11 too which hopefully can be sorted.
if its driving people crackers, i'll send anyone a .txt file of the originals!
and please, please keep writing stories, Aussiegirl - your work is getting sharper and really turns me on :)
Thank you.:) I am currently working on a story with H Dean, but I know it has been a while since I have put a new story up. I have a few on the go, and hope to get another one up again sometime in the next few weeks or so. As you know, it all takes time!:)Quote:
Originally Posted by slave ruthie
ohh it does! i've just sent ch 13 of Harvest of Tears in for the Library and i fiddled around with it for AGES before finally summoning enough courage to let it go lol!Quote:
Originally Posted by Aussiegirl1
Awesome, I look forward to reading it, ruthie!
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ohh it does! i've just sent ch 13 of Harvest of Tears in for the Library and i fiddled around with it for AGES before finally summoning enough courage to let it go lol!
I will be sure to read it too! I do know what you mean about having to let a story go, it is not easy to do! I am sure though, it will be wonderful!
(sigh)
just submitted the 14th chapter - sorry for the delay again!
Oh pritty pritty please any idea when the next chapter is going to be ready?