Rhabbi's first tough assignment

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Originally Posted by H Dean

Sure, I have my girl call yours and then they do lunch. The next thing I know they wind up in a hotel room in Billings doing things that would make a sailor blush. A week goes by and neither of us has heard anything. After another week I get that note that tells me she can't work for me because I am misogynistic, sadistic and socially inept - the whole reason she started working for me. The next thing I know I have to get a new gal.

I know what you're doing, and you know what they say: Fool me once, shame on you. Fool me twice, shame on me. I don't know what they say for the twelvth time, but I ain't falling for it again.

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Hey at least the second to last one didn't turn up 3 months pregnant with a lawyer on a leash.
Mad

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Originally Posted by Rhabbi

I actually have a network of people I can turn to, though one of them usually needs some prodding before she will turn loose on my stories. I find it helps for me to get her angry, which I have a talent for doing. Would love to add more people to it though.

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Hey what you and Dragon's muse do in the privacy of your own chat room is no business of mine. Still for the sake of her reputation you might try to be a little more discrete.

DM, you wouldn't run into this problem with Bruno, he's the perfect gentleman.

Mad

Okay, let's get somethign to burtalize in here, damnit! I want to abuse. I've been nice today and everything. Now, I want something to pick on. Rhabbi, get something in here for us. I am aching for a fight!

I'm hoping you didn't scare him off Mr. Dean....
Sometimes I feel you are misunderstood.
Mad

You feel it too? It hurts.

Looks in on Mad and Lews to see why they are not ripping up my story.

Sorry about that Rhabbi,
I thought I was waiting for you to do (yet another) rewrite on the intro. When in doubt ask, I'm getting older and senior moment may occur at random I'm told.

I would love to rip the story but haven't seen an update since 7/10.
that one I pounced on for form and pace but failed to mention I liked the direction you were going in with with the actual story.

Now I'm of two minds as to how to proceed. There are folks who would swear you need to plot this out in your head and on paper and then its a simple matter of back filling to come up with a nice tight story. (Patterson, Cole, Clancy)
Others say, screw the plot, its the characters that drive the story, (them's the ones that tend to write those 1000+ page books that turn into quintilogys or worse like Tad Williams, Stephen King)
How would you feel about doing the next chapter as a character driven piece then follow that by a tightly plotted action piece just to see some strengths and weaknesses of each technique?

Don't need to go crazy here just a couple thousand words per chapter We don't want to strain Mr Deans vocabulary:) besides if you hurry you might get it done before he's back.

Sorry for the delay, we seem to have miscommunicateD

Mad Lews

Somehow missed this. you want me to keep working on the backfill for my AAR I will do so, but I did post a story for you to look at, it just came pouring out one day and I am kind of proud of it now that I have had a chance to reread it a couple of times.

http://www.bdsmlibrary.com/forums/sh...ad.php?t=11720

As for the back story for AAR, I actually have done some of that, and am currently bogged down in designing the political structure of the Correllian Empire. for some ungodly reason they have a tricameral government, with the addition complication that the monarch actually has some real powers that cannot be overseen by the rest of the government. Not sure how the tricameral part came about yet, but investing some actual power in the Emperor was the only way I could make this story work. But this has actually forced yet another rewrite, and I will have a something for you to look at by next friday, if the real world cooperates that is.