Praise, Comments, or Suggestions for the New Lord Mobius's Dungeon

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Originally Posted by BabySub

Jade, your posts are stunning! I wanted to reply to the last one, but didn't have the energy until tonight, so I guess I'll have to use all that energy now in something else, seeing as you're not there anymore. Oh, wait.... Yuri still is, isn't he?

"Oh, Yuri..?"

Heh. I'll hopefully post tomorrow.

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Virtual Jade is still whimpering at the fact she walked out of the room leaving you two scrumptious morsels in the bed. :( It is taking everything I have to keep her from running back and pouncing you guys. :o I am so weak. ;)

Sir Chuck requires some surcease today, as the flu overcomes his body. I hope to be back with full vigor Sunday, but if someone could handle the new kid, I'd appreciate it.

Uuuuuurrrrrggghh.
chuck

Just to say sorry for not carrying on my character - been too many people around an only been able to get on here every now and then.
Anyway, I've only wrote a few lines as my character needs to build up to the initiation of being made a true sub then taught how to be a vampire dom.
If that is ok???!! Any questions please ask.
Thanks!!!!! :-[ :D

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Originally Posted by Jadetiger

Virtual Jade is still whimpering at the fact she walked out of the room leaving you two scrumptious morsels in the bed. :( It is taking everything I have to keep her from running back and pouncing you guys. :o I am so weak. ;)

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Don't be weak. You'll be back, and you know you'll get a welcome from those two when you do... how it goes, has still to be decided.

:: insert evil laugh here ::

Poor Sir Chuck... hope you get better soon.

:: sends hot chicken soup and hugs ::

Hi Everyone

Here is the link for the dungeon bio page
http://www.vampirespet.com/FAQMDCB.html

If you sent me a bio and it isn't on the page, please PM me and let me know.

If I've changed some vital bit of info, misspelled a word or two, just tell me and I'll do my best to correct it ASAP.

A few of you suggested we have a page for each character, but an alternative might be to have a list at the top of the page and links within the page for fast access.

At this stage of the game, I'm coded out. So if someone wants to step up to the plate and pretty this page, please copy the source and go for it.

Posting the pages is easy for me...coding them is not.

I'll be cruising with Captain Chuck soon on another fantasy voyage. I missed the first one but am looking forward to this trip. Jade, Jaden, Sari and I are signed up. Who else is coming?

Perhaps a lurker who's always wanted to play with us...

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Originally Posted by Ruby

Hi Everyone

Here is the link for the dungeon bio page
http://www.vampirespet.com/FAQMDCB.html

If you sent me a bio and it isn't on the page, please PM me and let me know.

If I've changed some vital bit of info, misspelled a word or two, just tell me and I'll do my best to correct it ASAP.

A few of you suggested we have a page for each character, but an alternative might be to have a list at the top of the page and links within the page for fast access.

At this stage of the game, I'm coded out. So if someone wants to step up to the plate and pretty this page, please copy the source and go for it.

Posting the pages is easy for me...coding them is not.

I'll be cruising with Captain Chuck soon on another fantasy voyage. I missed the first one but am looking forward to this trip. Jade, Jaden, Sari and I are signed up. Who else is coming?

Perhaps a lurker who's always wanted to play with us...

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Just read the dungeon bio page. My character is perfect. Just like to say thanks very much. Wil I be able to add more to as the character grows?
:woman:

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Originally Posted by Darkgirl

Just read the dungeon bio page. My character is perfect. Just like to say thanks very much. Wil I be able to add more to as the character grows?
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Thanks. Yes, you may add more at any time. Bios and updates can be sent to me my e-mail, PM or posted in this thread.

There may be a delay depending on whether or not I have access to a computer. I'll be doing lots of travel in April, but normally, I can have the new stuff up within a week.

outstanding Rube's, Very well done

It would be nice if Jinn could set that up as a link but alas nothing has been done.

Perhaps I will just put it down as a link on the bottom of my information
Good job Ruby

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Originally Posted by Ruby

If I've changed some vital bit of info, misspelled a word or two, just tell me and I'll do my best to correct it ASAP.

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Great job Ruby. I know it's impossible to edit something you've read several times. Here's the advantage of fresh eyes:

Lord Sir Chuck, last paragraph: "mental powers from a sharing more than a kiss". First "a" should be deleted.

Darkgirl, last paragraph: "tame her is to brake her". Should be "break".

Jade, history: "Her husband beat and rapes". Should be "raped".
Jade, history: "There divorce occurs when he runs". Should be "Their divorce occurs after..."
Jade, history: "wandering for 3 years trying to figured out". Should be "figure out".
Jade, legend: "they tortured and killed her fours sons". Should be "four".

Jaden, history: The last paragraph is a repeat and can be deleted.

"Mary (Teni aka truckinnhors)" should be "truckinnhorsin"

Myra: "left at the alter". Should be "altar".
Myra: "Mildar has dealt with her one more". Should be "on".

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Originally Posted by Ruby

Perhaps a lurker who's always wanted to play with us...

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Your invitation is very tempting. Maybe next time when I have more time available.

curious about this:

Dracubius - "Evil, Sadistic, Julius, frankly mean..." what's "julius"? is it supposed to be 'jealous'? Also, the capitalization here could be changed (ie. Sadistic -> sadistic)


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Mildar
"Anaged supernatural" should be "An aged supernatural"
"potions some times with" should be "potions sometimes with"
"If you come to his door be prepared to answer 3 questions." insert comma after "door"
"If you get them right he will reward you. If you get them wrong he will punish you." insert comma after "right" and "wrong"

Thanks everyone for the great comments and corrections.

Warning - I've also heard that there are some funky characters showing depending on the browser you are using.

This is a cry for help to Super MO/Jaden - If you have time, may you please copy the source code and make these corrections. If you don't have the time, just let me know and I'll put it back on my to do list.

Everyone else - keep those edits and suggestions coming. I won't be able to get to them for a few days and a more eyeballs won't hurt. ;)

Pretty Golden Slave Sari - great posts today - it's nice to have you back.

Jade - I just love how you keep these stories going.

Jaden - Cool dream - so real. A sweet interlude and reality check to the workings of the mind after a harsh session with two mistresses and a master. Poor baby thought you were going to get a nice fun spanking instead of a hard lesson. Behave yourself and I'll be happy to give you a fun spanking on our cruise.

Lord Mobius - I'll be missing you as I sail off with Captain Chuck. Thanks for the kind words on the bio FAQ.

BabySub - Have fun with Yuri. I'd say don't do anything I wouldn't do, but we both know virtual Ruby is a slut and there's not much she wouldn't do with the big guy. :D

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Originally Posted by Microwave0ven

curious about this:

Dracubius - "Evil, Sadistic, Julius, frankly mean..." what's "julius"? is it supposed to be 'jealous'? Also, the capitalization here could be changed (ie. Sadistic -> sadistic)


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Mildar
"Anaged supernatural" should be "An aged supernatural"
"potions some times with" should be "potions sometimes with"
"If you come to his door be prepared to answer 3 questions." insert comma after "door"
"If you get them right he will reward you. If you get them wrong he will punish you." insert comma after "right" and "wrong"

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Do we really need a Spell Nazi in the dungeon.

This is suppose to be a free and easy writing exorcise. It is suppose to be fun.
enough of the critiques K

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Originally Posted by Ruby

BabySub - Have fun with Yuri. I'd say don't do anything I wouldn't do, but we both know virtual Ruby is a slut and there's not much she wouldn't do with the big guy. :D

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LMFAO! Very true. I do intend to have fun. Lots of it. I've posted the beginning, but don't have time or the strength to do anything more with it tonight. I'll certainly have some sweet dreams though. ;)

The bios page is looking awesome btw, and I will, at some time this year, get a bio done for BabySub. Maybe. lol.

B - another amazing journey into your fantasies. Excellent story posts today, without giving away the plot - let's just way I'd be happy to have Yuri take me where he's going to take you, anytime. :-)

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Originally Posted by Ruby

Warning - I've also heard that there are some funky characters showing depending on the browser you are using.

This is a cry for help to Super MO/Jaden - If you have time, may you please copy the source code and make these corrections. If you don't have the time, just let me know and I'll put it back on my to do list.

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Yep, with Mozilla Firefox i get some odd characters..and yep, i can fix the page for you

edit: fixed and emailed off to you, will update further fixes as they get discovered and "reported"

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Originally Posted by Mobius

Do we really need a Spell Nazi in the dungeon.

This is suppose to be a free and easy writing exorcise. It is suppose to be fun. enough of the critiques K

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yessir, not tryin to criticize you in particular, just correcting what chromedome11 missed and also, when i think "julius" i think of that Orange Julius food chain..

Thanks Jaden for taking the time to fix! Big hugs and extra kisses and cuddles when you wake from your virtual dream.

Everyone - the new page is up:

http://www.vampirespet.com/FAQMDCB.html

Hey, just checking in real fast. love what's happening in the dungeon :). not much time to really sit down and write lately though.

If my mistress deems me worthy enough please feel free to take me along with you on the cruise :p I'll try to make some time to stop by and write a bit.

*waves as she runs off*

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Originally Posted by Myya

Hey, just checking in real fast. love what's happening in the dungeon :). not much time to really sit down and write lately though.

If my mistress deems me worthy enough please feel free to take me along with you on the cruise :p I'll try to make some time to stop by and write a bit.

*waves as she runs off*

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Oh, yes, pretty pet, you are now coming and will be. He He....:-)

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My hubby, Master T, granted me permission to put up one of my GLAM photos as my avatar. Unlike Dorian Grey, I have aged a bit since this was taken. But in the dungeon, I'm forever 29 and holding. LOL

Darkgirl, Jade and Kat - thanks for inspiring me to be brave enough to use the new avatar.

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Originally Posted by Ruby

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My hubby, Master T, granted me permission to put up one of my GLAM photos as my avatar. Unlike Dorian Grey, I have aged a bit since this was taken. But in the dungeon, I'm forever 29 and holding. LOL

Darkgirl, Jade and Kat - thanks for inspiring me to be brave enough to use the new avatar.

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HOT DAMN RUBY!!!!!!!

:: screams ::

"Take me, I'm yours!!"

Wow.. you are such a gorgeous woman! Damn, I gotta get more of you in the dungeon. How long is this cruise exactly..?

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Originally Posted by Ruby

Oh, yes, pretty pet, you are now coming and will be. He He....:-)

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My hubby, Master T, granted me permission to put up one of my GLAM photos as my avatar. Unlike Dorian Grey, I have aged a bit since this was taken. But in the dungeon, I'm forever 29 and holding. LOL

Darkgirl, Jade and Kat - thanks for inspiring me to be brave enough to use the new avatar.

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Ruby,
Eveything BabySub said and more. You are beautiful and I already knew that but the picture shows that you are just as beautiful on the outside as you are on the inside. Poor Yuri may be spending some nights all alone. :p
Trapped on a boat with Ruby. Yay

yay! Congrats to those brave enough to share pics (of which, I am not one :p) You're all very beautiful people! :D :cool:

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Originally Posted by Ruby

...Darkgirl, Jade and Kat - thanks for inspiring me to be brave enough to use the new avatar.

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Thanks RUBY!! I too am totally amazed by your beauty.
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I for one feel safe enough on this site to be able to 'take' my orders from SIR to show pictures of our adventures and that would not be possible without you and everyone else here. We really are one BIG family!!!
Thanks to everyone!!
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You guys are too kind. Thanks. :o

If you ever want to feel better about yourself, go get one of those glam photos taken at the mall. Loads of make up and they treat you like a queen. Works for me. ;)

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Originally Posted by Ruby

You guys are too kind. Thanks. :o

If you ever want to feel better about yourself, go get one of those glam photos taken at the mall. Loads of make up and they treat you like a queen. Works for me. ;)

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Mmm... trapped on a boat with gorgeous Mistress Ruby... *cough* and equally gorgeous everyone else, of course.

A lovely photo, Mistress. :jawdrop:

Sari

Darlin, I had no idea that you were so PRETTY! Wow.

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Originally Posted by Ruby

Based on the number of views and fun we're all having with the new Lord Mobius's Dungeon, let's make this thread a place for people to comment and join in.

Those of you lurking, enjoying, yet still keeping those comments to yourselves, feel free to post here. Anyone wanting to make comments, requests or suggestions, go for it.

To start this off, I'd like to say thanks to the newest slave girls, Myya and sarijak02, and to Lord Mobius's clever handling of their capture / playtime. Talk about taking a few ideas and running with them - whew - your exploits today were hot, hot, hot!

Hope the ladies are enjoying their time with the alien. I am.

And a big thanks to everyone in the dungeon for their hardwork and effort.
Bravo! More! Encore!
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There's nothing like that in the mall we have where I live. :: sigh :: We're lucky if there's about 10 shops in it. LOL.

Jade.. you have the flu?! Poor honey!!!! I know it sucks... have some virtual hugs and kissies, cyber chicken soup, and MUCH LOVE to help you get better.

I'm in the process of writing for the dungeon thread, but need to sleeeeeeeepppp..... Will try to post tomorrow.

ZZZZZZZZZZzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz.......

You know, I've often had this fantasy of my son taking a picture there all gorgeous but naked above the waist holding his little daughter, also naked, against his chest. There have been pics like that, but something tells me that one from there would make it look even more beautiful.

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Originally Posted by Ruby

You guys are too kind. Thanks. :o

If you ever want to feel better about yourself, go get one of those glam photos taken at the mall. Loads of make up and they treat you like a queen. Works for me. ;)

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Alura - (pcaitlynrose) - looking forward to you posting your bio - miss brave purple collar - here.

Jade - honey, I hope you feel better soon. The flu - yuck!

BabySub, missing your writing, but totally understand. Happy morning to you when you get this and I hope you slept well.

Jaden - sorry to interupt the massage - you can get back to it shortly - or not. He He

Lord Mobius - clever capture of our brave new lady. Well done, sir. Ah, your cleverness is why I joined this dungeon.

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Originally Posted by pcaitlynrose

You know, I've often had this fantasy of my son taking a picture there all gorgeous but naked above the waist holding his little daughter, also naked, against his chest. There have been pics like that, but something tells me that one from there would make it look even more beautiful.

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Sadly in the states such inecent pictures offen get the person in truble. Busy body's at the one hour photo shop come across a picture of a naked child will often call the athoritys.

"You got some splaning to do lucy"