'The End' when something is not the 'true' ending.

[GreyJack]

Well, the link was broken, so I can't really judge not being able to read the stories, let alone their endings. Usually though, a story should end when the story has been told. That doesn't necessarily mean a "conclusion" or even a resolving has been reached, if that is the intent of the writer. It just means the story the writer wanted to tell is over. Some people like open-ended stories because that's how life is, it just goes on. Other people like the standard "the end" tales because they want the simplicity of "a beginning, a middle, and an end." You mileage may vary.

One way, writers make endings "satisfying", however, is by foreshadowing how the story will end. There are many techniques for this, using symbols, previous events which turnout the same way, etc. Then if the reader is smart, when the ending is reached they can say "I knew it all along." Personally, I dislike stories like that, but, what are ya gonna do? LOL.

[TheVariableX]

I read a few of the chapters of your story. I particularly liked The True Valedictorian.

I would direct you to... http://www.bdsmlibrary.com/forums/showthread.php?t=9251
... if you haven't already read it.

2. Give the reader at least one character he or she can root for.

You have no characters the audience can root for. They suffer, which I have to assume most of us quite enjoy reading about, but then they lose. They don't just lose, they lose everything, quickly with no hope of recovery in sight. People can feel sad for that character but it's hard to get behind it.

People may enjoy the story format more if the individual chapters were longer and could follow a characters suffering, but if that's not the story you want to tell, don't do it.

7. Write to please just one person. If you open a window and make love to the world, so to speak, your story will get pneumonia.

The chapters I read did a wonderful job of conveying feelings of hopelessness, if thats what you were aiming for you hit your mark. If people don't want to read if that's a different matter.