I'm planing a story about a white female cop and a young black female gang leader. I've got 2 story lines. 1 where the cop is forced to become the slave or 1 where it's due to love. Which story line would you prefer??? :confused:
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I'm planing a story about a white female cop and a young black female gang leader. I've got 2 story lines. 1 where the cop is forced to become the slave or 1 where it's due to love. Which story line would you prefer??? :confused:
the cop is forced to become a slave and is cuffed, viciously violated with the baton and the gun against his/her neck :) the gang leader has a knife and an attitude!
The forced story has been done over and over. So, if you do that one you should be ready to do it differently htan before. You will really need to freshen it up if you want it to stand out.
Ignore Icey - she thinks everything should be done by force, brutality and degredation. Hmm...on second thought....
I, for one, would find it refreshing to have a BDSM story written that was based on love. Not like a cheesy romance, but profound love with lots of psychological control, humiliation and stripes. lol Kindly include quess work for the reader and a nice twist at the end.
*Starts humming "What I Did For Love" as I saunter from the room.
lol ok ignore me ...im kind of sad like that ;) (i wont point out the bad spelling H Dean lol) but you can turn force into a lot of things and it can be original and still have a real twist to it all you need is a bit of imagination, just remember 9 times out of 10 that while a lot of people like to see storys end in love when it comes to 'porn' they dont give a damn about that stuff! perhaps as the cop climbs out the car she stumbles slips and drops her gun the 'wild' gangster grasps it thrusts her against the engine......ok i know typical boring stuff but im not a writer! though put that same situation in the desert just a few trees around ...trees, branches,twigs,dust,thirst, stones,dead cars,engines etc
:tyThanks for the advices.
Icey don't worry little one. I'll never ignore you. But if you like it rough, you could take a look at my other story here: My daugters Slave. If you haven't read it already.
As for this new story, I think that I'll let the first meeting be quite forcefull and violent and then let the cop find out that she love to be treated that way
That wasn't bad spelling, that was messed up fingers getting ahead of themelves. Now, Icey, for your insolence, I shall be forced to chastise you!Quote:
Originally Posted by icey
So, PTHTHTHTHTHTHTHTHT!
Hey, I did a story based on love called "The Last Night". Almost no one read it but everyone who did seemed to love it.Quote:
Originally Posted by blythespirit
Seems like nobody wants to read a romance. Damned dirty apes!
I reckon, for a story to be good, you have to get your reader to care about your main character. Doesn't matter if you take the love route, the violent route or combine the two, as long as your reader cares about the character...and that you've included plenty of whips, chains and forced sex, of course. :D
The stunning blonde 36 C white cop who has never had an orgasm, pulls over the stunning black gang leader for a traffic violation and instantly falls in love with her 62Z breasts, then reeling fom a kiss she is Kidnapped taken to a deserted forest hideout in the mountains of Staten Island, beaten, whipped, and videoed enjoying the Lesbian BDSM action then blackmailed into becoming a prostitute, spending her nights wandering around Brooklyn in a microskirt seventeen inch heels a top three sizes too small and no underwear selliung herself for fifty cents plus local taxes, when she is not on duty, and then she is caught by the colleague who has the hots for her, forced to become the department prostitute as well and somewhere along the line becomes a pullitzer prze winning arsonist.
Shucks, Its been done, but hey just call the heroine something different. Desmarelda instead of Katherine/ Kitty.
Incidentally black women certainly look a lot more appealing since the new folks moved in the white house......
Glad you enjoyed the excerpt of my story enough to remember the names.Quote:
Originally Posted by mustafa.fuch1
Ta.