Views sought on direction/plot

I have a story with its thirteenth chapter posted (Grace's Hard Lessons) - generally the story contains themes of M+/F, nc, humiliation, bdsm, blackmail etc. Have also received a number of encouraging reviews and emails since the initial posting, although they seem to have dwindled recently.

Now, there has been some suggestions from a couple of readers on developing further a couple of scenes/ideas from prior chapters. Doing this in the next few chapters will trace the submission of the female protagonist, in greater detail, from being a proud lady that has to be coerced and forced into the humiliating acts that she is subjected to, into a state where she finds herself submitting, albeit reluctantly, to be used like a slut.

However, it is a concern that spending the next few chapters on this in detail will reduce the momentum of the plot (the original plan was to progress the story fairly quickly where the protagonist will be subjected to more extreme exploitation and explicit sexual situations), and that some readers may lose interest.

I would be interested to hear from other writers on what you would do, as well as from readers, on any views or suggestions. thanks.

Dark Avenger

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Originally Posted by darkavenger

I have a story with its thirteenth chapter posted (Grace's Hard Lessons) - generally the story contains themes of M+/F, nc, humiliation, bdsm, blackmail etc. Have also received a number of encouraging reviews and emails since the initial posting, although they seem to have dwindled recently.

Now, there has been some suggestions from a couple of readers on developing further a couple of scenes/ideas from prior chapters. Doing this in the next few chapters will trace the submission of the female protagonist, in greater detail, from being a proud lady that has to be coerced and forced into the humiliating acts that she is subjected to, into a state where she finds herself submitting, albeit reluctantly, to be used like a slut.

However, it is a concern that spending the next few chapters on this in detail will reduce the momentum of the plot (the original plan was to progress the story fairly quickly where the protagonist will be subjected to more extreme exploitation and explicit sexual situations), and that some readers may lose interest.

I would be interested to hear from other writers on what you would do, as well as from readers, on any views or suggestions. thanks.

Dark Avenger

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Grace should never be free from the prospect of more pain (tit-torture would perfectly emphasize her helplessness). She ought to be having an icy-knot feeling in the pit of her stomach of whether she's done/omitted something to earn more agony. Of course there is always the prospect of the guy's mere whim being to torment her. I don't think she should be given lasting scars, but other than that...

Humiliate her by having her publically self-destruct her prior "unslut" reputation of haughty priggishness. She services all erections in the form she's told to enact, regardless of being in full view of witnesses.

Perhaps have her chair changed to a kneeling chair to more show her position. Pictures can be seen on
http://www.healthyback.com/store/sit...elingchair.htm
As an added idea, this also changes access to the female anatomy while seated.

Have the underwear that shows up one day be a butt-plug harness, a chastity belt, or other pervertable.

Have her given a comfortable bra. Then called into the office first thing in the morning, have her bra replaced by ropes, and kept like that in breast bondage for the rest of the day.

She is forced to take off her shirt in the morning in the office. Someone writes something on her back in marker, and the shirt goes back on before a meeting. She doesn't know what it says, or if it's visible.

She breaks her leg. The signatures on the cast can be quite risque, and she can't take it off for 6 weeks. Visibility of the signatures all depends on length of the skirt allowed.

How about some labia rings with little bells that are audible as she walks and visible if skirt is short enough.