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Cheerleaders' Rape and Torture by Semiater
(10/10, 35 votes) (review it)
Story Codes: M+/f+ bestiality enema fisting spanking teen toys WaterSport BDSM slavery bondage real humiliation torture nc Extreme
this story is more current ---and rated as most popular
Do our Critic's want to let us know why ---
to me it looks like every fetish has been covered ---maybe that is the appeal
well it is this weeks Story to look at closely
Can you post a link to the story? I searched on the Author name and Story title and both searches came up empty.Quote:
Originally Posted by Rabbit1
sure thing----- http://www.bdsmlibrary.com/stories/s...p?storyid=3160Quote:
Originally Posted by Mistress M
:kiss:
I haven't read all the story yet, but got well into it.
Very well written indeed, I was most impressed. It takes a lot to get me interested in a story these days, but that flowed along well, not too involved or complicated.
Not entirely to my tastes, my own personal preference is for more consensual stories, but well worth a read.
Well above average, a tad more consensual & I'd be sold.
Tojo
I read this story a while back (while it was getting written), and I actually very briefly conversed with the author by email.
In short, the reason I think it is so popular, aside from the fact that it is so well written, is that it embodies some element of realism. (the author in fact told me, he strives to do this as he writes).
In many stories I read on the web now, things 'work out' so ridiculously easily for the protagonist, that I can no longer connect with the story. The story essentially becomes a list of heavy scenes with little to interest you in what comes next.
In this story, things happen in such a way that it is at least border-line believable; i.e. not all submissives immediately enjoy their lot, etc.
This story is not a manual for an 'ideal' BDSM lifestyle; and speaking more from my own opinion I actually find this a very positive thing.
In any event, once a story gets on to the top 10, and is one of the first you see when you click "recent pop.", the number of viewers skyrockets.
Just my humble opinion.
you all are seeing exactly what a writer should try to do
1 Try to make the reader feel that they are there--thru detail decriptions
2 Make it real--- as close to real life as possible --unless it is Sifi
3 Using proper grammar and spelling
4 Do not force the story ---let it flow
5 Most important ---be satisfied with the story yourself before publishing it
these are some of the most basic rules of writing-- there are others and we will see them as we continue to look at stories here
I've only read the first two chapters of Cheerleaders story, but I just cannot walk away from it and consider these comments to hold true for the rest of the story. That said, I'll review it online for the author once I'm finished wanking to the rest of it. If it is a two wanker, the guy gets a ten! :bondage:
Here is my opinion of the first chapter:
1. The author's style, written in the first person, contains so much realism with inner dialogue, that I was laughing at his candor and amusement at the girls distress through most of it. Yes, laughter, revulsion, and the scary realism.
2. The description of the girls, their various physical attributes, as well as their facial expressions and behaviors, complete some form of character development of the victims. The author's already given us insight as to where he's coming from.
3. I can't help but wonder, if the author is writing from inside the protagonist. Is he like this sadistic fuck that he portrays?
I'd sure like to hear Semiater's side of the story, the inspiration, and how he got inside the character. Think you can arrange for the author to post some responses to these questions here Rabbit? Nothing like hearing it from the horse's mouth. :bondage:
Excellent story that appeals to the prurient interests of the reader. Semiator made me feel like I was part of the action.
Well written, easily read as well.
Having 5 girls with different personalities and body types allowed him to share the inital rape scene five times within a single story... withut having to reinvent the perpetrator, the scene, nor the environment five times.
Now, there is a point that he got bored with the story or got a little lost... and made some of the action fully repetitive. Later he finds his way clear and the story picks back up.
Obviously I enjoyed the content as well.
Definitely an A+
Here is the problem I have with this story…. I read a couple of chapters some moths ago and I stopped (I was too busy; the story did not bore me!) Recently I wanted to finish it and I went back to it… It took me ages to find the place where i stopped reading. I kept scrolling up and down. Reading fragments, getting déjà vu in chapters I did not read. Not good. (BUT – I finished it and enjoyed it nevertheless.)
It is very well written. Very readable, smooth. Five different girls were used very skillfully (in bdsm and narrative sense) – yet the author is relaxed about it and does not fall in the trap of creating ‘variety’ for it’s own sake. Even if I have might have wished for more variety – more extreme stuff would probably spoil it.
Realism? The story is reasonably realistic WITHIN the parameters of the story and within ‘erotica’ genre. It is not ‘real’ in the absolute realistic sense – and that is, to my mind, good! Perhaps the repetitiveness can be seen as; realistic’.
Very enjoyable and hot read.
8.5/10 from me.
I, too, enjoyed the read. The author's commitment to a narrator/main character who is completely without moral limitations in pursuit of his own gratification is really compelling.
It's been awhile, but I don't recall him even once "apologizing" for acting out the outrage he engages in. The result: it gives me "permission" to just enjoy the sadism and self-centered hedonism of an ugliness we all know is hidden down inside.
hJ
I especially liked it. Cheerleader's submission is a long fantasy of mine and it wasn't streatched to the point of unbelievable. All in all It was very well written and I would recommend it to people who like that sort of thing.