I finally got it posted! :)

Hi all :) I finally submitted my first try at a story on the library! :):) Check it out and tell me what you think ;) ALL pointers, tips, etc are welcomed! Thanks!!!

Grats!!! I look forward to reading it once it's posted...what's the title?

ok it is posted ;) It is called a Date with Destiny....please check it out and tell me what you think.

Hi demurelyyour,
I'm a newbie like you, and I went and got the story, and ------------I loved it--------------
I'm not a writer, so I'm not going to pretend to be a critic, and I'll restrict myself to just "Liked it","Didn't it", and you came out former rather than latter. What I especially liked was the creative way you characterize moan, groans, and speaking with a gag in your mouth. I laughed when I read them..........
PPPS. I hope that story didn't follow the reality that closely.
I was a long time in the scene, and nobody I knew would have done what your heroine did.
Thanks again, demurely, for an enjoyable read

Linky for those interested

Good story, flowed nicely and was a pleasant read; needs some basic reworking with grammar and spelling, however. Remember, spell check is your friend!