okay, I'm going to just rant this out and hope at least one author reads it.

people check your facts, continuity etc.

I'm not talking little tid bit grammer errors. I'm talking big stuff like time lines, jumping around, espcailly if your doing "young" stories, or talking about the past, when your putting a chronology together keep it straight its so annoying to read a story and the years are so far out of whack when something happens it annoying.

also, understand adolesance a bit more if your going to be discussing it either in a flash back or a progression. most 4 year olds DON'T masterbate, girls do not grow from nothing to DD in a summer. and its inhuman for anything but a 0-1 year old to grow a foot in a year or even 2.

I realize this is fantasy but to make it inhuman it just blows the fantasy.