Early one morning
The combination of sun streaming through the window and the noisy birds outside woke me. I always wake up before my slut. She’s good at many things, but she excels at sleeping. You could set off a small nuclear explosion next to her and she wouldn’t notice.
* There's no reason for him to be "gentle" yet. Do men really get up gently or announce that they have done so?*
I swore to myself, realising that I
wasn't going to get back to sleep.
So, I got up and went to sit in the chair across the room. It is just in front of a window, and I thought I’d read while I waited for slutty-pie to wake up.
* Balls crawling was too funny. It broke up the mood for me to imagine them crawling along trying to get to her. *
I sat down in the chair, and when I looked up, I was suddenly taken by a sight that made my balls
my cock twitch. It was already hot
, at this time of year it never gets cool, so we were both starkers
, with only a light sheet on the bed. We’d kicked the sheet off some time during the night
, so the bed contained only my little nekked whore.
She wasn't just lying any old how, oh no.
Even asleep my little darling was still the ultimate sub. She slept on her back
with her legs spread wide and not a detail of her beautiful shaved pussy escaped my view.
Her arms were above her head, crossed at the wrists. I’m not kidding. She was simply
, perfect.
I sat and watched her for a while, amazed at this beauty, so naturally spread and offered. My cock joined in and urged me just to leap straight on top of her.
"Go on,
" it said
, "Plunge into her offered delights
. Hold those wrists and pin her down and take her with one sharp thrust.
Rape the Sleeping Beauty.
"
But I wanted to enjoy this a little longer.
Instead of listening to my prick, I got up
(no comma needed) very quietly. Even though she’s a heavy sleeper, I didn’t want to risk spoiling the moment. I went over and opened the toy box. Carefully avoiding any clinking sounds, I picked out the items I needed.
(only one period)
I went back
(deleted over) to the bed with my booty. I’d spent a lot of time choosing that bed
. There isn’t a single edge I can’t clip, lock or tie something just how I want. And I definitely wanted
what?.
I stood over her for a few minutes, just drinking her in. Her head was turned to the left, framed by her raised arms and long wavy blond hair. Her tits were a little flattened
from being on her back
. Her brown nipples were sticking out, titillated by the early morning breeze. I reached out and very, very lightly ran my hand from her elbow down her side, sensing each rib, the dip of her waist and the curve of her hip. She sighed and twitched slightly. I stopped and waited for her breathing to become deep and slow again.
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I
moved to the foot of the bed. Very carefully, I clipped first one and then the other padded metal shackle around her ankles, padlocking them shut. I clipped the chains onto the metal frame. This left her with just a little movement,
but no more than about an inch for each leg.
The legs had been easy. I had to be more careful with the wrists. I couldn’t risk waking her. Slowly and
carefully, I moved the top one slightly to one side and waited
. I watched her face. She turned her head to the other side
. A little frown
appeared briefly
. She shuffled her hips into the bed a little more.
(I'm not sure what that last line means. Moving her hips, yes, onto the bed a bit more? Hmmmm.) But she stayed asleep.
With infinite care, I locked the shackles on her wrists
(no comma) and clipped the chains to the same point on the wrought-iron bed-head. This lifted them very slightly off the mattress. I was sure that now
(no comma) she would
start to surface. I hoped she was having a nice erotic fantasy. I imagined her pussy swelling and getting wet and glistening. I went back to the foot of the bed to look. Oh yes. She may still have been asleep, but her dreams were working overtime.
She shifted slightly, pulling on her arms a little.
OK, it was time I moved. I wanted it to be me who woke her
. I didn’t want her to
wake on her own. I stepped quickly back to the side of the bed and started to stroke her with the whip. Each of its soft leather fronds
tickled gently across her: her exposed neck, her soft breasts, her flat belly; her spread thighs… outside… then in…
* We don't know that she is being tickled gently, because we aren't in her head. He is guessing here and perhaps is imagining what she is feeling. This is a great example of jumping from first person narration to an omnipresent narrator in the middle of a tale. It can't be used, so we need a work around. *
Using the soft leather strands fronds of the whip, I tried to tickle her gently across her exposed neck, her soft breasts, her flat belly, and her spread thighs. I aimed for outside then in, repeatedly.
She moaned, stretched, her eyelids flickered. This was exactly the moment
I wanted. I brought the whip down hard, really hard, right onto her stretched, wet pussy lips. She
woke yelling
. Her body arched as she tried to pull away
, but she was
trapped from head to foot. As she pulled and wriggled, the chains
rattled. Her eyes opened suddenly and very wide.
They showed she was frightened for a moment, then, recognising me and the situation, they immediately sparked with anger.
* Again, he is guessing her emotions. So he might make a statement that is something reflects his point of view. *
It looked like she was frightened for a moment before recognising me and the situation. I think her fear turned quickly to anger.
She yelled, “What the fu-?”
I just gave her my best mean, mean smile and ran the whip over that luscious quivering body again. What a way to start the day.