Need some help - stumped

[rob.wilson]

OK, so I'm writing a continuation to a story I started earlier and find myself stuck. I need feedback, but this isn't the type of thing you drop in the lap of your writing group.

Any volunteers to help me out with suggestions/comments?

[Dododecapod]

I'd certainly be willing to take a look, give you my take, for whatever it's worth.

[Dododecapod]

Hello? Anyone out there?

[rob.wilson]

Sorry about that. I've been A) Busy at work B) Not writing lately C) Not doing what I should be doing D) Aducted by aliens that resemble Bill Cosby and forced to have endless amounts of jello pops shoved up my ass.

Check your PM

[Carmenica Diaz]

Aducted by aliens that resemble Bill Cosby and forced to have endless amounts of jello pops shoved up my ass.

Sounds like a marvellous story outline

[YoungBlood]

Carmenica i thoroughly enjoy your writing and would love the opportunity to help you out. Feel free to give me an e-mail or message me on aim.

["Roof"]

OK, so I'm writing a continuation to a story I started earlier and find myself stuck. I need feedback, but this isn't the type of thing you drop in the lap of your writing group.

Any volunteers to help me out with suggestions/comments?

I'm sorry if my suggestion explaination is a bit long; just want to make sure you grasp my point of a story them you may like. If you like the theme, use freely totally as your own. Anyway here goes on the story suggestion: How about doing a story that centers on a high school or college campus? A male gang (maybe fraternity?) is in de-facto control of the campus and have banded together to remedy the problem of stuck-up coeds who are duds on dates and at parties. Too many coeds are hostile to boys making advances on them and even adverse to doing something as reasonable as wearing a miniskirt. The gang is brutal in their methods of enforcing total slutdom on pretty coeds. The gang has a private dungeon wherein they will have as "guest" some of the more feministic coeds. They'd be utterly broken and totally subservient to any male lust, no matter how perverted those lust are and not matter how humiliating the situation is for the coed. In fact, humiliation of the coed(s) is a top goal. These priggish coeds will be given such savage torture---specially tit-torture--- as will leave them broken in spirit from any spark of resistance. They will, after such "re-education" be well-aware that more torture awaits for them if the gang learns of any infraction of the new slut dress code (from now on, SHORT hemlines, lots of cleavage) or of their behavior (they WILL submit to any male's sexual attention and obey his instructions on what to perform). The goal is to make total whores of all coeds and no disobedience to any male's orders to them will be tolerated.