School's Out at the Witch Academy

[submissivewife]

http://www.bdsmlibrary.com/stories/s...p?storyid=2766

I thought the plot was well thought out and the visual descriptions were great. I really didn't care for this story because I don't care for SciFi. I'm sure others will think it good though. I feel the story ran a little quickly and slowing down the pace would have made this a more interesting read; more history I think.

[Widget]

I too thought the pace of the story was too quick. There needed to be just a little more description. I have read stories by C before and this one is his standard formula. Catching magical virginal creatures, they get deflowered and then killed.

http://www.bdsmlibrary.com/stories/s...p?storyid=4643 was his latest offering and I think he did a much better job of expanding the plot and background while also varying slightly from his normal story line. I still had some questions about the characters motivations but all in all his writing is always improving.

[Tojo]

Not my cup of tea at all, I'd have to say....

Still, it was imaginative & entertaining- definitely needs to be slowed a little, & maybe some more background added.

Tojo