Hi Tessa,

Thank you for posting this so quickly!

I added a copyright and changed the title of the thread to add the title of your horror, (dare I say?), gorror story.

I'll stand back and wait on this version until the others have chimed in.

Keep up the great work and write on!


All,

Please have a look and provide some constructive feedback.

What worked for you?

What didn't?

Is there anything you would change to make it better?

What impressions did the story leave you with?

For those of you compelled to provide grammar suggestions, go for it!

Ruby