Well done gregsta!

There was a real atmosphere about this piece and lots of great memories too.

You only had a few spelling errors - somber should be sombre and bullett should be bullet and finally you need an apostrophe in short man's syndrome.

The only other area you need to think about is the use of commas. For example, in the sentence He sipped on the Bourbon in the tumbler savouring the sweet and sour taste it left in his mouth. there needs to be a comma after tumbler. Just think about where you would naturally put a pause when you are saying the sentence out loud and that is where a comma goes in your writing.

However, you have used commas correctly in other places, so I don't think is a big issue for you.

OK, your task is to now write another short story, but this time you can use any means available to you to check your work. Good luck!