Well done!

I really liked the story and you have a good grasp of the uses of commas and semi-colons.

You have a few spelling errors, but rather than me pointing them out, I would like you to go over the text again and see what you can find. I know only too well how easy it is to make spelling mistakes and I often find you can miss them easily as you just get used to how the word looks on your page. If you are unsure of the spelling of a word, then underline it, and any words you have changed, type it in different colour.

Thanks again for a great story!

Aussiegirl