Sweetling, I feel a gloriously naughty mystery about to unfold: skeleton coming out of the cupboard! and you taking up the reins... I hope you carry on with it, assignment or not.

You obviously put a huge amount of care into crafting what you write, it is impressive. Rather humbling.

There are various linguistic issues, which I know you expect. Some of them are down spell checker deceiving you: "an apple orchid" - should be 'orchard', for example.

Some, I would hesitate to 'correct' - you have a unique style and way with words, and the very fact that you come to English as a non-mother tongue speaker means you do magic things with the language that would never occur to mother-tongue speakers. It is this that adds a level of whimsy and poetry to phrases that you probably consider or intend to be mundane. However there are instances where the word used is clearly not the one you meant: "purport", for example, should be "comport" or possibly "disport".

So I recommend a good on-line dictionary, and check on the meaning of anything you're not 100% certain of.

I know you will get some detailed feedback from Talia & Sheepish; if you would like me to go into the actual words more with you as well, let just PM or mail me. I'm more than happy to spend the time on it, as you know.