Drkrvn,

Excellent beginning. I got a real sense of the enjoyment of the weekend. Now, get a little more specific for me.

I have never been to Disneyland. For your second assignment, describe your favorite ride to me. Not only what goes on with the ride itself, but the way it makes you feel (does your heart pound, your fingertips tingle?) Remember to involve as many of the 5 senses as possible to layer the experience and make it even more real for the reader.

rose