Hi Tessa,

I really love the conversational tone of this piece. It starts as narrative but seemlessly morphs into a conversation directly with the audience (me). You say at the outset, 'I had just typed and forgotten all about grammar and spelling' -- I'll leave the nitpicking to others, but the only thing that really stood out to me was a slight overuse of exclamation marks. Your words are strong enough to express things without them, in most instances where you've used them.

I especially liked the way you finished the story: 'I owe her 60 cents....Or maybe I do.' There is something so real in that, I am still smiling as I think about it

anonymouse