WOW! Another great job anonymouse, thank you!

I was totally lost in this story, wondering first what her punishment would be and later if she would go outside as asked. I felt her fear and her surprise.

I was not aware of anything I would change, the story flowing well. Even with the addition of the emails and chat section, it was easy to follow the story line. You have some great ideas that you are more then capable of putting into some great stories.

I am happy to move you up to level three and will look forward to reading more of your work.