Something I forget to mention in my comments about Assignment 2 -- 'the Scroll Test'.

As a reader (personal reviewer) of say, asstr text stories, the first 'test' I apply is the 'scroll test'. This is to say, I scroll the text and look at the opening words of every paragraph. If I see lots of the same opening words in every paragraph, I move on. I apply the same test to my own work. If I see myself being repetitive, there had better be a darn good reason for being so.

The same test (for me) can and should be applied within paragraphs.

anonymouse