anonymouse,

Another gem of a story from you.
It's quite the tease and you've created some wonderful images.

I think your story is much, much sexier than the photo you chose as your inspiration.

The pacing is excellent, as is your grammar and punctuation.

Your next assignment will be in this thread. Select one of the males in this story, perhaps even "the" leading male, and using the first person perspective, tell us the same story in the past tense with an active voice.

For example - you wrote as the voice:

He waits for you to nod before you feel his hands drift away from your head. Then, the firm hold of your bra suddenly goes slack. Its limpid straps slip easily off your shoulders before it all feathers silently down your arms to drop on the floor.

In your next version, as the male telling the story you might write something like this:

I waited for her to nod before I let my hands drift away from her head. The firm hold of her bra suddenly slackened. Its limpid straps slipped easily off her shoulders before it feathered silently down her arms to drop on the floor.

Do your best to get into his head.
What is he thinking, feeling, and smelling?
Is her skin soft and smooth?

Enquiring minds want to know.

Have fun and keep up the great work!

Ruby