This is precisely why I would like to send it. People I know like my writing, but few of them are writers themselves. I will not be offended if you shred it or don't like it. I am writing my other project for myself more than anyone else.
All respect for your time frame; there is no rush. Any attentions, brutal or otherwise, you bestow on me with regards to my work is greatly appreciated. I am not afraid of criticism; pour salt straight into my open wounds, please. I know it is good for me. I do not take my mistakes personally and only want to improve my work. I savor and learn from forthright critique.
At the same time, it is a bit embarrasing to make so many mistakes, this does kinda feel awkward, to have my flaws exposed. I willingly endure this so that I can progress, make fewer, or different mistakes.
I would be hurt if you spared my feelings.
I redid the barscene as per your and Dragon's muse's advice and feel it came across much better.
Thanks again. I will send you something different eventually.
Julia