Quote Originally Posted by Mad Lews View Post
Very sweet. Enough to make Al Bundy sweat
My only suggestion would be to work on "Like chocolate melting on my tongue the suede is to my foot. Soft. Velvety."
Maybe "The soft velvety suede caresses my foot, like chocolate melting over my tongue."
The allusion is great, so very feminine, but seemed a tad awkward. Just the musings of a mad one.
Mad Lews
Thank you for the wonderful feedback everyone. What do you think of this as an alternative to the akward sentence?

The suede wraps my foot carressing me like a soft velvety chocolate melting over my tongue.