Okay,

I don't feel the need to pull your story apart again, so I will just give you some general comments.

Firstly, WELL DONE!

I know as a writer how hard it is to come up with an original and interesting idea, and make it work as a story. I really liked it, and think it worked well in making the reader think about the characters and what roles they played.

I would love to see it longer, but do understand how hard it must have been to maintain the story. It might be a story you go back to in the other levels and expand upon, if you feel you can. I wouldn't worry about the switch comment, I didn't!

I also from the start felt there was a twist, especially with the story title making me think about who was serving whom. I didn't think it strange that the Master might clean up the play room or set out the table, and it certainly was not strange that he might worship the ground on which she walks too. I agree that at the end I would have liked a bit more information about him, so I could see that control he has over his sub, but it was not needed to make the story complete.

I think you also hit upon the very dynamic that makes D/s so interesting, that a Dom/me can worship and do lots for their sub. In that way, it can really be a question of who serves whom!

Satan, thank you so much for the time, thought and effort you put into your Level two assignments. As H Dean noted, you have improved so much, which now makes you a very, very good writer instead of just being a very good writer! You really do have a lot of talent and I will look forward to seeing that talent grow even more in the next levels.

I will let Ruby know that you are ready to tackle level 3! Good luck and please pop back and read/review the other students work if time allows.

AG

NOTE: I just read your newest version of this story, and it is even better than the original. I love the changes and I do thank you for making them. It is amazing how just a few little changes strengthened the story even more. I will also let Ruby know you will not be ready to begin level 3 till after the next two weeks. Enjoy the break!