DarkSister,
I liked it. I was dying to find out what happened after the door opened.
I'm a newbie here, and I don't feel qualified to critize. There are two things I'd like to pass on for your information for use in other pieces. When I was a kid my first job was on a ranch in Colorado breaking horses. No horse is going to stop because you "say" something to him. Horses shouldn't be confused with Fido or Spot. They rein in because someone puts a little muscle to the reins. And horse will go the summer and then some on rough, rocky terrain without throwing a shoe. A horse shoe will last a lot longer than you Nikes.
But I had no complaints about how you used those items to build the drama of the scene. When I read those items in the story, I suspended my judgement and thought, "Good way to build the drama." I only included the info for FYI in some other piece.
And PS DarkSister, I'd love to hear the rest of the tale.