Feed back on first attempt: Tales of Acient Rome

[TG]

Hi, I'm just starting out. Made one disasterous stab at a story, learned my lesson, and tried to improve with Tales of Acient Rome. I was hoping somebody could give me a review so I could find out what I'm doing right and wrong.
---- There wouldn't happen to be any critics in the house?
Someone willing to cut up a newbie, all for educational purposes, of course! Pat on the head would be good too.
Also, question. I've got a new one in the works, and I'd love some feed back on it before I post. (Newbie, here!) How could I get a story up on the forums before it's posted on the site?
Thanks, guys, for the help, TG (thomas_g50)

[ElectricBadger]

I didn't find your story -- did you just submit it to the library? If so, there's a delay until Tiger converts the format and posts it.

To post a work here for review, you can either simply cut and paste it into the text box or, as I personally prefer, click on the "Go Advanced" button below the text box and click on the Staple-looking thing to attach your story as a word document. That's usually much easier to actually edit and repost, rather than just comment upon.

[TG]

Thanks ElectricBadger, I'll go look for the staple thingy. The story was posted on the site on 6/7. When I first joined I didn't know how things worked, and used a different user name than the one I pubished under. Wrote the story under name TG
And huh, hey, thanks for answering! You gave the place a nice homey feeling for me. I'm beginning to feel this might be a pretty niffty place to belong

[ElectricBadger]

No worries, I'm always thrilled to see new authors!

Looks like the attachment thing worked fine, should be all approved and whatnot now.

And glad I could make this place homey; lotsa good people and a nice open community, we're a kinky lot but pretty relaxed for all that. Welcome to the fun!