DiamondStar IV

[TG]

I know it's a lot to ask people to wade through long monster stories because I've posted some monsters. It's asking people to commit a lot of time. But everyone likes some feedback, even if it's a 12 lb. tome you've uploaded
Then I got here, and found you'd thoughtfully broken it up into bit sized pieces, so here goes. One bite sized piece at a time.
I only have 6 English courses behind me, and none a Workshop, so I did what I usually did: Sat down and read a story, and liked some things and not others. And that's as good a crtique as you got.
Sorry, better luck next time.
I attached a critiqued copy of the last chapter to you. Will try to work back from there as time permits
TG (Thomas_g50)