Dear Dean the Great,
Since the students are doing such a great job of editing and offering suggestions, I'll not nitpick any further.
I do have questions.
Is this story set in the past, present or future?
How are the body parts of the living artwork stimulated in such a manner to avoid cramps, atrophy of the limbs, and poor circulation?
The creator of the living artwork is Jerry O’Connell -- as in the famous actor from Stand by Me, Crossing Jordan and a host of other movies like Kangaroo Jack?
http://www.imdb.com/name/nm0005278/
If you want to keep this name, you may want to add a middle initial or name to distinguish him from his famous counterpart.
Looking forward to seeing the next version of this chapter,
Ruby
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